Oh DTG, they are crappy stories. It's a good story to read though because it's short and packed with action. It's a bad story in, well, stories, because they lack much description, like many of these stories do, they're short because they pretty much only hold like one clip instead of "a whole episode". Also, you didn't really take time to build up your characters into huge personalities. I can understand why P. Metallica said that. Just explaining to you why I would agree.

-seasnake