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Ben I read your newest chapter! It was very very very sad. So they have powers? Also Big brother is Ben isn’t he? Was it coincidental that big brother and Franklin’s names put together is, Benjamin Franklin? Idk but I was just wondering. Also….EMMA?!?! My Emma?!? LOL, definitely not, it was probably just a tiny Easter egg. I though that chapter was very sad tho…they had to say goodbye to their family. That’s so sad. 😢
-SunnyFox57
Ben, I read chapter 55.5!!!! Man, that was sad... So Be- I mean Big Brother already had super powers before hand to getting on the Ark and not only him and Franklin. But all of their younger relatives. But he doesn’t remember anything about that side of them or doesn’t want to remember. And it’s Ben right, he has the flower. Man it was sad to see that they had to leave and couldn’t say a proper goodbye to their relatives. I really enjoyed it and I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
From Ben
The first chapter of Hopes Call was reallt cool MrGhostGamer, i cant wait to see Melissa brings to the table with Hopes Call!
PrimalApex i didnt realize Cyrus' medallion was a warning for him that hed transform, rather than the actual source of his werewolfism. Well I reread chapter 27 and it makes a lot more sense. Also Josh Swans words certainly made me remember Tortuga bombings, thanks a lot Jack..
The last 2 chapters were really cool. It was nice to see how Emma and Andrew escaped Tortuga, that was pretty cool, most Tortugans made it out safely, but not all of them.. pretty sad
Also damn the shadowy figure never fails to be badass
Anyway, im still conflicted on my theory on Aragorn or his shadow being the shadowy figure. The story has pointed it toward him but at the same time away
1. He is a shadowy figure
2. He knew about Tortuga, so he was a Tortugan
3. The Peacekeeper Zooey Young knows him so he must be infamous
4. Hes very good with the sword, Aragorn was a good dancer, and Josh Swan says sword fighting is like dancing
5. The poem / hint Sunny sent
but at the same time...
1. He doesnt act like Aragorn whatsoever
2. Aragorn is DEAD, so...
3. He doesnt seem to know about the Dark Phoenix kingdom. Aragorn was a royal so he has to have known about them at some point.
Very low chance it might be Aaron Buckleshoot. After all, he witnessed 1. the death of Aaron Jr by the Captain Shortstacks, 2. he knows the mayors are somewhat at fault 3. he knows Tortuga is a very cruel city. Also half of his family either died or went missing because of Tortuga. Also he never went after the PIRATES because he never knew they were there. Even though they were responsible for what happened. Plus, Aaron and his animals scared the living hell out of the peacekeepers, which may be how Zooey recognized him.
But at the same time ehhh that guy was old as my grandpa bro no way hes dodging attacks like that. But at the same time he kind of sneaks up on them in a surprise kill.
Plus, when he saw Paul's kid (Penny) he got a bad memory. Aaron had two children and four grandchildren, so its not too far fetched.
Shadowy Figure actually is quite the mystery this was fun. Thanks for the search Sunny!
Okay seeya later, whaddya think PrimalApex plz help us out on this mystery
Sunnyfox, I read the last two chapters of TDP!!!! So we’re all caught up in the timeline now right? Right!?! The shadowy figure seems like he’s going to find the Kingdom of the Dark Phoenixes next. For whatever reason he’s feels the need to kill those who are guilty in his eyes. I really enjoyed this story and series!!! I can’t wait for the next book!!!
Mr.GhostGamer, I read chapter one of Hope’s Call!!!! Hm, so was that how Sam got back to the Ember kingdom? Poor Mateo!!! I wonder if he’ll live? I really enjoyed it and I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!
Until Next Time!!!
From Ben
hey guys i have to delay the Prologue to tomorrow sorry i was working on my recent chapter all day long and im a lil too tired to do anything really
Chapter 55.5 is out in Mosasaurus. Its a bit of a tear jerker. Well, at least for me. Anyway, a few details may reveal the identity of Big Brother.
Its a very sad chapter, i think its almost as sad as Mr Ma's death.
More Q and A
Ben asks “Out of all the characters you’ve written, which one do you hate the most?”
-pat and doctor bubba
Ben asks “whats the most memorable scene in the stories you’ve read so far?”
-June having a fire ball in her hand and bringing it closer to someones face
Ben asks “would you consider adding paul to your story as a true side character? JK, but would you? Third question for real: if there is one thing you could tell to your favorite characters in the stories you’ve read (including yours), what would it be?”
-to adding paul i need to know what he’s like (i have barely any time to be on dododex), what i’d say to my favorite characters “your so amazing”
Ben asks “i hope this isn’t to personal but what was the biggest reason for picking your alias?”
-my biggest reason is bc I used this alias so many times on servers i play on and well…. Its my microscoft acc also (on servers if you see someone named selveevee, slyveevee, or sylveevee thats me yes i spell my username wrong sometimes) but my dad keeps changing to pass for my microsoft acc… also bc its a mix of my favorite eevee evolutions its a sylveon and eevee mixed.
Thats all the questions i could find for this q and a bye
-sylveevee
(First one I messed up on)
Brief character personalities of my cast, this is mainly for Wyvernian. - Ben
Samuel: This guy doesnt have an implant. His morality is on the edge and he believes that he must do what is necessary and make whatever sacrifice necessary to escape the ARK. He's also very observant and detail-oriented. Evidently, in environments where there poses no danger he actually begins to relax and have fun in his own way; treating his allies like true friends. He doesnt consider any of his crew true friends except Star, and Nova (his best friend in Terran High)
Aurora: Her implant allows her to chart a mental map with the stars. Even though she has friends, she doesn't mind abandoning them for her own selfish goal of survival. This stems from her fear of death, and the fear that everything she did would go to waste. She was the valedictorian of Terran High. She has romantic interests for Samuel because he reminds her of her late lover, Borealis, but deep down she knows she does not stand a chance.
Neddy: His implant allows him to detect other human beings in the nearby vicinity, which makes his implant hum and glow. He was Samuel's first ally. He is a bit of a nerd and knows a lot of pointless trivia, especially with dinosaurs. He is very clumsy and not very intuitive, but he tries his best to be a good person and make friends regardless. He loves Ruby, but their relationship is not "official" yet. Probably because they dont have time for that.
Ruby: Her implant allows her to craft whatever she needs at extremely fast speeds. She is very loyal to Aurora as she is her friend, but as the story progressed her allegience wavers. She begins to wonder if its the right thing to do whats best for only them, and Neddy's morals begin to rub off on her. She also enjoys meeting new people and making new friends. She tries her best to maintain a serious no nonsense attitude like Aurora, but she immediately changes to a more happy outgoing "let's just have friend" girl once she gets closer to Neddy.
Star: A dodo bird that likes to follow Samuel around. She never went through the taming process but is still Samuel's friend. Unlike other creatures in the series, she acts very very human. Its almost as if theres a human trapped inside her body. She'll do things like roll her eyes, lick her beak, or even laugh and ruffle her feathers and flap her wings to express herself. She does not seem to approve of Aurora's infatuation with Samuel and expresses joy whenever her actions to win Samuel over fall flat. She also possesses the uncanny ability to "enlighten" others, clearing their mind and allowing them to focus extremely well. When she uses this ability, her chest glows like an implant.
In TAOH implants do not work the same way that they do in the original game. Instead of acting as universal translators and respawners and crafting objects, they possess their own special abilities to help the user survive on the island.
from Ben
Chapter 43 of pop was really noce Wyvernian. So i guess those paranoid Amargasaurus have captured Skyla... cant wait for the next!
Sunny I jumped in joy when it was revealed that the "guests" were Emma and Andrew! And i had a huge feeling that it would be those 2 after Jack got the glimpse of the lady with red hair after knocking his head on the rock. But why did he get that vision? Maybe Emma's power has grew and she can view whats happening throughout any space and time at will, and voluntarily. And theyre starting to learn more about the past of their father and the Shadow Phoenixes, awesomer!
also its kinda cute how Andrew calls her Em
Welp, that was cool. Seeya later
Ok thanks for giving crossover characters guys, uhh im going to write the Prologue/Intro when i get home from school.
Also for when they spawn in their respective "zones" i dont think it will necessarily have the original residents (for example Pandora wouldnt have uhh the human tribe). BUT im thinking there would be NPCs in a way, random characters who dont exactly have relevance to any story who act as residents of the Omega Timeline or whatever we're calling it. They also came there in the same way our characters did, rifts in the space and time. Also what have we decided on the name, I like Omega Timeline.
Also I agree with you Wyvernian how we shouldnt include other characters just yet for the first few, to set up the New Universe and introduce characters.
You all can use the Prologue as a template for your respective chapters
I posted the next chapter of TDP. Also PrimalApex I read the newest chapters of Journey and I really enjoyed it! Rust and Crimson are so funny together. I wonder what’s about to happen with the rune and why Rust was acting like that. I can’t wait for the next chapter!!
-SunnyFox57
OK, after much consideration I have decided what my first five characters will be. I will describe briefly there powers and personalities that I tried to make so that if y’all use them then y’all will know some stuff about them although Ben basically covered everything y’all need to know about them.
1. James Aragorn Riddle from TTDOT. In TTDOT he was simply called “Aragorn” do to the fact that he used his middle name so that his evil brother wouldn’t recognize him so in the crossover it would probably be easier to just call him “Aragorn”. He may seem a bit cold on the outside to strangers but he loves his family. is especially protective of He wears black all the time because…well no one knows, even as a kid he wore black. We learned in TTOTSP that his power is to control shadows and he can disappear and appear in different shadows or in his shadow which he controls. He was killed by being hung.
2. Arianna from TTDOT. James wife. A very patient living woman. She has no powers or medallion bc she married into the family. She loves to sing, especially with her husband. In TTOTSP James’ best friend Cole was in love with her and wanted to marry her but she thought of him only as a friend. She doesn’t like her children talking with food in their mouths.(idk why y’all needed to know that. 😂)
3. Emma from TTDOT. Emma’s power although not very explicit is that she can see the future and the past. However she will not use her power in the crossover (unless it’s in sudden flashes. Like in dreams) much bc she hasn’t gone blind yet. Her going blind was caused by her medallion power. She is very cheerful and sweet and is in love with Andrew Rodriguez. Michael, AKA the creepazoid is always after throughout TTDOT and gets very upset when she marries Andrew.
4. Jay from TTDOT. Has a very mischievous and fun loving personality. He is more controlled, strategic and cunning then his twin Jack. Jay has multiple powers. Some I have mentioned and some I haven’t. Jay can open portals and create illusions.
5. Jack from TTDOT. Jack is very easily embarrassed and has a bit of a temper issue at times(Like at him and Jay’s chess games) He will sometimes stutter when he gets to upset but otherwise…not so much. His power is regeneration, so he heals very very quickly. Also Josephina and Jaquin prefer Jay over him which he doesn’t really like.
These characters have all the memories of before chapter 24. Emma and Andrew are still in love with each other. I think that covers about it!
-SunnyFox57
Reader, nobody has been talking to you because we all (well at least me) thought you left or something, you haven’t spoke in a wile, welcome back man! I vaguely remember you saying something a week or two ago and I responded, maybe you didn’t see? Anyway glad your back! Or at least talking again.
-Wyvernain
Wow Sunny that was really in depth! That’s very helpful actually. Which of the characters are you planning on having in the crossover? to start out at least.
Also the first chapter we all write should be just our stories characters waking up, because then we can kinda introduce them and how they behave before other writers write dialogue for them, in short.. I don’t wanna butcher anyones characters 😆
I’ll make my character list now, gonna have to hunt down some characters through my old chapters.. I’m gonna do side characters because 1, reasons I already listed and 2, there are some characters I really like but just never did anything with so this gives them a chance.
-Wyvernain
Ben, I read chapter 55!!! Man, I wasn’t expecting that with Aurora and Samuel!!!! That was crazy!! And I think Andrés character is pretty cool!!! And the way Samuel tried to protect him from Aurora and tried to go for peace!!!! And that he is with Tiffany!!! Finally we see the character of legend!!! I really enjoyed it!!! I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!
Okay about the collab, I really like the idea of shards from each of our stories. It reminds me a lot of Chronopolis in the Marvel comic books, tv shows and lego game. I think it definitely be cool that way!!!
Okay, now for my suggestions on the collab.
First a single name suggestion. A Story through Twilight, that really all I got.
Next, a few small characters, from none of our universes. Maybe making them into mischievous villain like characters like Wyvernian or crazy kooks that have kinda lost it being in isolation. Maybe even mascots from famous Ark players like Clive and Barry, Mystique, Cupcake or Brian(this idea might be a little bit too crazy for the story or make the story a bit silly depending on what you all think, but it’s just an interesting suggestion nonetheless).
I do think we should do Wyvernian’s idea for start of 2-4 characters. Personally, I was only gonna do four characters and three of which haven’t been revealed yet in Ultimus and yes they are my main characters. But that’s just me. Also I’ll probably will come in later on depending on when we do this. So it would probably go Ben, Sunnyfox Wyvernian and then me. My characters aren’t gonna be revealed for a few more chapters yet but I’m definitely gonna join in this collab!!
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
The Terrible Demise of Tortuga Character List - Story by SunnyFox57
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Extras:
Andrew Rodrigaz: A 19-year old boy who ends up falling in love with Emma Peterson. The kind and the gentleman-type, their precious love is always interrupted by Michael’s undying wish to marry Emma. Andrew learned a few medical techniques from his father, who is a doctor. He ended up fleeing to Josh Swan’s bunker in the sewers with Emma.
Emilia Bolton: She does not like Tortuga and wants to leave as soon as she can. She is really bad at sneaking around, apparently. She explained what the death tolls were to Emma Peterson. She seems to be good friends with Emma. She fled to Josh Swan’s bunker in the sewers during the British Bombings.
Rachelle Cobraz: Daughter of the peacekeeper Helen. She is extremely obedient to the law and she wanted to learn as much as she could about Tortuga so she could become a Peacekeeper like her mother. After her mother’s death, she decided to sneak onto the disembarking pirates’ ship to enact her vengeance for the ones she believed responsible for her mother’s death.
Ms. Clara Hawkthorne: The new teacher of Tortuga after the old mayors passed away. She pronounces “Miss” as “Mizz”, and is extremely strict and traditional in her ways of teaching. She segregated the boys and girls, and also applied corporal punishment to those who disobeyed or disrespected her (such as Jack, Jay, and Emma). It is revealed, however, that she too was physically disciplined by her own teacher when she was just a child. She must really care about her mother because she was willing to come to school late just to help her. She thinks that hybrids should be destroyed. She also despises the mayors as she refers to them as “maggots”.
Mrs. Lois: The shopkeeper of a small shop in Tortuga. She is very old, and has been a Tortugan for many years. Extremely loyal to the mayors and the city’s laws. A very reserved, stern, no-nonsense lady. She sold the engagement rings to Andrew. Her current condition is unknown.
Captain Piranha: The old captain of the pirates, he and his crew decided to invade Tortuga in an attempt to find and kill Josh Swan for “betraying” them. Josh Swan likes to call him Captain Fishy. After getting in a duel with his old partner, he was defeated, but Josh spared him. Piranha killed him anyway, and he and his pirates fled Tortuga, unaware of their stowaway.
Captain Shortstacks: A British captain, he probably works under the British Navy. His real name is Francis Hugo, but his crew like to call him Captain Shortstacks behind his back because he is rather short. He and his men made their way to Tortuga to bomb it because they believed it to be a pirate haven.
Lieutenant Johnson: He works for Captain Shortstacks. He told him about the pirate ship that was headed to Tortuga.
The Mysterious and the Mentioned:
Tom: Aragorn’s brother. He was a part of the band that Aragorn created. For some mysterious reason, Tom is livid at Aragorn, and something may have happened to a woman close to Tom. After the British Bombings took place he came to investigate Tortuga, and after discovering an unconscious Josephina and Jaquin, he took the two in because Josephina looked like “her”.
Cole: Apparently, he was Aragorn’s best friend. He was a part of the band that Aragorn created.
Shadowy Figure: A vengeful spirit who will make everyone pay. They were last seen executing everyone inside the mayors' bunker.
The Terrible Demise of Tortuga Character List - Story by SunnyFox57
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Swan Family:
Josh: The father of the Swan family. A former pirate who worked under Captain Piranha, he deserted the pirates to settle down. He trained his son, Jack, and Jay under the arts of sword fighting, even though owning weapons was against the law. He believes sword fighting to be like dancing. During the British Bombings he had to kill Helen in self-defense, and he engaged in a duel with Captain Piranha. He defeated Piranha, but was killed by Captain Piranha because he had decided to spare him.
Nia: The mother of the family. There is nothing notable about her. During the British Bombings she fled to the bunker in the sewers with her son.
Eric: The only son of the Swan family, 13 years old. He became friends with Jack and Jay and the three of them were trained by Josh, Eric’s father, in the arts of sword fighting. He has a crush on Elizabeth. During the British Bombings he fled to the bunker in the sewers with his mother.
Mayors’ Family:
Mayor Roi: The mayor and teacher of Tortuga. He and his wife “peacefully” passed away in their sleep, presumably.
Mayor Reine: The mayor and teacher of Tortuga. She and her husband “peacefully” passed away in their sleep, presumably.
Michael: One of the sons, 17 years of age. The main source of conflict in TTDOT, his parents’ dying wish was to have him marry a beautiful woman. Emma is his target. Cruel and selfish, he cares about no one but himself. After he found out Emma and Andrew were getting married, out of pure spite and anger he ordered to have Emma’s parents hanged, which was successful. Once the British Bombings occurred he fled to a secret bomb bunker. The last to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Mike: Goon #1, also 17. Has a few brain cells left to spare. First of the brothers to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Mickie: Goon #2, also 17. His name is not as generic as his two brothers, but that doesn’t change the fact he isn’t very intelligent. Second of the brothers to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Law Enforcement:
Executioner: The one who swings the ax. He wears a cloak that conceals his face and nobody knows his true name. He is somewhat bloodthirsty and always aches for murder. After the British Bombings, he fled to the mayors’ bunker with the mayors. He was slain by the Shadowy Figure first.
Helen: One of the Peacekeepers of Tortuga, and the mother of Rachelle Cobraz. Once the British Bombings occurred, she engaged in a battle with Josh Swan because she believed him to be a pirate because the pirates were searching for a traitor named Josh Swan. She had been waiting to kill Josh for a long time, but she was killed by Josh in an act of self-defense.
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