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Reader, nobody has been talking to you because we all (well at least me) thought you left or something, you haven’t spoke in a wile, welcome back man! I vaguely remember you saying something a week or two ago and I responded, maybe you didn’t see? Anyway glad your back! Or at least talking again.
-Wyvernain
Wow Sunny that was really in depth! That’s very helpful actually. Which of the characters are you planning on having in the crossover? to start out at least.
Also the first chapter we all write should be just our stories characters waking up, because then we can kinda introduce them and how they behave before other writers write dialogue for them, in short.. I don’t wanna butcher anyones characters 😆
I’ll make my character list now, gonna have to hunt down some characters through my old chapters.. I’m gonna do side characters because 1, reasons I already listed and 2, there are some characters I really like but just never did anything with so this gives them a chance.
-Wyvernain
Ben, I read chapter 55!!! Man, I wasn’t expecting that with Aurora and Samuel!!!! That was crazy!! And I think Andrés character is pretty cool!!! And the way Samuel tried to protect him from Aurora and tried to go for peace!!!! And that he is with Tiffany!!! Finally we see the character of legend!!! I really enjoyed it!!! I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!
Okay about the collab, I really like the idea of shards from each of our stories. It reminds me a lot of Chronopolis in the Marvel comic books, tv shows and lego game. I think it definitely be cool that way!!!
Okay, now for my suggestions on the collab.
First a single name suggestion. A Story through Twilight, that really all I got.
Next, a few small characters, from none of our universes. Maybe making them into mischievous villain like characters like Wyvernian or crazy kooks that have kinda lost it being in isolation. Maybe even mascots from famous Ark players like Clive and Barry, Mystique, Cupcake or Brian(this idea might be a little bit too crazy for the story or make the story a bit silly depending on what you all think, but it’s just an interesting suggestion nonetheless).
I do think we should do Wyvernian’s idea for start of 2-4 characters. Personally, I was only gonna do four characters and three of which haven’t been revealed yet in Ultimus and yes they are my main characters. But that’s just me. Also I’ll probably will come in later on depending on when we do this. So it would probably go Ben, Sunnyfox Wyvernian and then me. My characters aren’t gonna be revealed for a few more chapters yet but I’m definitely gonna join in this collab!!
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
The Terrible Demise of Tortuga Character List - Story by SunnyFox57
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Extras:
Andrew Rodrigaz: A 19-year old boy who ends up falling in love with Emma Peterson. The kind and the gentleman-type, their precious love is always interrupted by Michael’s undying wish to marry Emma. Andrew learned a few medical techniques from his father, who is a doctor. He ended up fleeing to Josh Swan’s bunker in the sewers with Emma.
Emilia Bolton: She does not like Tortuga and wants to leave as soon as she can. She is really bad at sneaking around, apparently. She explained what the death tolls were to Emma Peterson. She seems to be good friends with Emma. She fled to Josh Swan’s bunker in the sewers during the British Bombings.
Rachelle Cobraz: Daughter of the peacekeeper Helen. She is extremely obedient to the law and she wanted to learn as much as she could about Tortuga so she could become a Peacekeeper like her mother. After her mother’s death, she decided to sneak onto the disembarking pirates’ ship to enact her vengeance for the ones she believed responsible for her mother’s death.
Ms. Clara Hawkthorne: The new teacher of Tortuga after the old mayors passed away. She pronounces “Miss” as “Mizz”, and is extremely strict and traditional in her ways of teaching. She segregated the boys and girls, and also applied corporal punishment to those who disobeyed or disrespected her (such as Jack, Jay, and Emma). It is revealed, however, that she too was physically disciplined by her own teacher when she was just a child. She must really care about her mother because she was willing to come to school late just to help her. She thinks that hybrids should be destroyed. She also despises the mayors as she refers to them as “maggots”.
Mrs. Lois: The shopkeeper of a small shop in Tortuga. She is very old, and has been a Tortugan for many years. Extremely loyal to the mayors and the city’s laws. A very reserved, stern, no-nonsense lady. She sold the engagement rings to Andrew. Her current condition is unknown.
Captain Piranha: The old captain of the pirates, he and his crew decided to invade Tortuga in an attempt to find and kill Josh Swan for “betraying” them. Josh Swan likes to call him Captain Fishy. After getting in a duel with his old partner, he was defeated, but Josh spared him. Piranha killed him anyway, and he and his pirates fled Tortuga, unaware of their stowaway.
Captain Shortstacks: A British captain, he probably works under the British Navy. His real name is Francis Hugo, but his crew like to call him Captain Shortstacks behind his back because he is rather short. He and his men made their way to Tortuga to bomb it because they believed it to be a pirate haven.
Lieutenant Johnson: He works for Captain Shortstacks. He told him about the pirate ship that was headed to Tortuga.
The Mysterious and the Mentioned:
Tom: Aragorn’s brother. He was a part of the band that Aragorn created. For some mysterious reason, Tom is livid at Aragorn, and something may have happened to a woman close to Tom. After the British Bombings took place he came to investigate Tortuga, and after discovering an unconscious Josephina and Jaquin, he took the two in because Josephina looked like “her”.
Cole: Apparently, he was Aragorn’s best friend. He was a part of the band that Aragorn created.
Shadowy Figure: A vengeful spirit who will make everyone pay. They were last seen executing everyone inside the mayors' bunker.
The Terrible Demise of Tortuga Character List - Story by SunnyFox57
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Swan Family:
Josh: The father of the Swan family. A former pirate who worked under Captain Piranha, he deserted the pirates to settle down. He trained his son, Jack, and Jay under the arts of sword fighting, even though owning weapons was against the law. He believes sword fighting to be like dancing. During the British Bombings he had to kill Helen in self-defense, and he engaged in a duel with Captain Piranha. He defeated Piranha, but was killed by Captain Piranha because he had decided to spare him.
Nia: The mother of the family. There is nothing notable about her. During the British Bombings she fled to the bunker in the sewers with her son.
Eric: The only son of the Swan family, 13 years old. He became friends with Jack and Jay and the three of them were trained by Josh, Eric’s father, in the arts of sword fighting. He has a crush on Elizabeth. During the British Bombings he fled to the bunker in the sewers with his mother.
Mayors’ Family:
Mayor Roi: The mayor and teacher of Tortuga. He and his wife “peacefully” passed away in their sleep, presumably.
Mayor Reine: The mayor and teacher of Tortuga. She and her husband “peacefully” passed away in their sleep, presumably.
Michael: One of the sons, 17 years of age. The main source of conflict in TTDOT, his parents’ dying wish was to have him marry a beautiful woman. Emma is his target. Cruel and selfish, he cares about no one but himself. After he found out Emma and Andrew were getting married, out of pure spite and anger he ordered to have Emma’s parents hanged, which was successful. Once the British Bombings occurred he fled to a secret bomb bunker. The last to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Mike: Goon #1, also 17. Has a few brain cells left to spare. First of the brothers to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Mickie: Goon #2, also 17. His name is not as generic as his two brothers, but that doesn’t change the fact he isn’t very intelligent. Second of the brothers to be assassinated by the Shadowy Figure.
Law Enforcement:
Executioner: The one who swings the ax. He wears a cloak that conceals his face and nobody knows his true name. He is somewhat bloodthirsty and always aches for murder. After the British Bombings, he fled to the mayors’ bunker with the mayors. He was slain by the Shadowy Figure first.
Helen: One of the Peacekeepers of Tortuga, and the mother of Rachelle Cobraz. Once the British Bombings occurred, she engaged in a battle with Josh Swan because she believed him to be a pirate because the pirates were searching for a traitor named Josh Swan. She had been waiting to kill Josh for a long time, but she was killed by Josh in an act of self-defense.
The Terrible Demise of Tortuga Character List - Story by SunnyFox57
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The Buckleshoots:
Aaron: A Tortugan who is the local veterinarian. The caretaker of many prehistoric and mythical creatures. He and his family live in a boathouse connected to a bridge. Aaron personally took it upon himself to warn the Petersons of the strict curfew laws, something which law enforcement and authority do not warn newcomers about. The peacekeepers fear him and his creatures. Once the British Bombings took place he and some of his family managed to flee Tortuga by detaching the boathouse and sailing away.
Aaron's Wife: Her name is unknown, but she had died giving birth to their last son, Joe Buckleshoot.
Amara: Aaron and his wife's first and only daughter. She ended up marrying Peter. She fled Tortuga on the boathouse with some of her family.
Peter: A baker who married Amara. He hired Arianna to work at his bakery after they immigrated to Tortuga. He fled Tortuga on the boathouse with some of the Buckleshoots.
Joe: Aaron and his wife's last and only son. He ended up marrying Amanda. He had ended up with a harmless sickness as an infant that left him blind. He fled Tortuga on the boathouse with some of his family.
Amanda: Joe's wife. She fled Tortuga on the boathouse with some of her family.
Elizabeth: Amara and Peter's daughter. She's around 13 years old, and has a ‘small’ crush on Eric Swan. During the British Bombings she was in their bakery getting food when a bomb that crashed through the bakery went off. She was knocked away, but her condition is unknown.
Justin: Amara and Peter's son. He's only 4 years old. Even though he cannot pronounce Elizabeth's name correctly, he still adores her. During the British Bombings he was in the bakery, and a bomb had landed inside, presumably killing him. His condition is unknown, but he is most likely dead.
Aaron Jr: Joe and Amanda's son. He really likes studying and talking about fungi. He is also very studious as he likes to participate in class. He joined Josh’s sword fighting lessons a little bit after Eric, Jack, and Jay’s enrollment. In a twisted sense of irony, he was killed after Captain Shortstacks impaled him with his sword.
Olivia: Joe and Amanda's daughter. During the British Bombings she witnessed her brother’s death, but she managed to escape alive and physically well on the boathouse.
Steve: A teddy squirrel that Elizabeth enjoys carrying around.
Aaron's Animals:
Troy: A dog that is a cross between a German Shepherd and a wolf.
Gabriella: A hound. She had puppies. Probably with Troy.
Ol' Betsy: A Sarcosuchus that gets hangry if not fed on time. Was the one who scared the peacekeepers. She is almost as old as Aaron, he got her as a kid.
Archie: An Archaeopteryx.
Scoundrel: A Pegomastax.
Diana: A Shinehorn.
Jax: An Araneo.
Carmen: A Titanoboa.
Jerboas: Aaron takes care of a family of these.
Umbra: A hybrid between a Dilophosaur and a Shadowmane. Aaron’s most recent addition to his family of animals.
From Ben
Okay heres the decision for the initial characters from my story. Drum roll please
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1. Samuel
2. Aurora (bruh)
3. Neddy
4. Ruby
5. Star
I think five is fine since Star is literally a dodo that cant talk (kinda). So its basically 4.
These characters have the memories of their Chapter 40 counterparts, when they set off on their mission to find Tiffany. Samuel's morality is on the edge, Aurora is still grossly infatuated with him, Neddy and Ruby kinda have the guts for each other, and Stars starting to think of more clever ways to communicate with Samuel.
More info later; ill release character lists for TTDOT and TTOTSP first since im finished with those already
Also Sunny which story are you pulling your characters from
Ok, I have some ideas for the crossover, first of all how about calling it
~<the achitina rift>~
Eh, eh!
Anyway.. so as far as the world they’re in, I like the idea of it being shards of the arks our characters live on like the floating island from HoP etc.
and then for the antagonist/villain I think I’d be interesting to not have a big bad style villain and just have some of our more villainous characters causing mischief, and then that could fit into this lore we are seemingly going towards, like they are just there because of unexplained rifts in time, there’s no puppet master behind everything like Salizar.
And I still think I’d be nice if we used some of our side characters or characters that died, because then there’s no explanation in our actual stories needed and we can explore new characters and then it’ll be easier for everyone to make dialogue for them without them sounding weird and way different from the stories they are from, of course you guys don’t have to do that but I’m going to. And I think we should stick to 2-4 characters at the start and then add more if it doesn’t seem overwhelming, because depending on how many people join in it’s gonna be SOOO many characters, me, Sunny, Apex, Ben, potentially Sandmaster and Moon. Those alone x3 is 18 characters, that’s quite a few to keep track of especially if they all group up. And as for the order I think it should be in order of who joined the collab so Ben, Sunny, me/Apex (idr which one of us came first) etc.
Super excited for this it’s gonna be fun. Now we just need to figure out who is joining, what characters your bringing (and maybe short explanations on their history and behavior) and we need to choose a category, I’m down for Yi ling.
-Wyvernain
OK, here are a few name ideas I came up with. Don’t judge me if they sound weird,I’m just terrible at making names.
1. Stories intertwining.
2. A tale of how several special worlds came together. (*slaps forehead*)
3. A whole new timeline
That’s all I’ve got. I know my ideas stink so just feel free to ignore them. I really like Ben’s name idea tho!
-SunnyFox57
Ben I read ur newest chapter and I loved it!! So Tiffany is Tina Originals!!!! I did not guess that. I think Aurora needs to calm down, she keeps running off and she is so desperate for attention from Samuel. I wonder who Andres is. Maybe Wolfgang? Idk. I can’t wait for the next chapter tho!!!
-SunnyFox57
from Ben
Ohhh so thats how theyre going to go on a Journey! PrimalApex chapter 3 and 4 were so much fun to read i really liked the interactions! And Rust and Crimson probably have the funniest "friendship" of all time.
Im wondering whats gonna happen now, soo the rune made the obelisk terminal act up, if its the terminal.. will they end up on a different Ark? Or maybe a different realm in Fjordur (tbh i dont know how the obelisks in Fjordur work).
Ok, seeya later!
From Ben
Ok lets see, lots of questions bout the crossover.
So, how will we plan the story... what characters will we use, according to the Boss:
1. I think the crossover should only be in 1 creature to make it easier for us. Kind of like how Fire and Fangs is only in Wyvern. Lets do a creature that isnt really much traffic in.. Like uhh Xi Ling or whatever that thing was called. The Aberration raptor (its a PC creature, on Ascended, on a DLC).
2. For the order i think it should be like a rotation, We'll just do it in the order that we joined the crossover. I'll write the intro/prologue, then Sunny writes Chap 1, then so on and forth.
3. Will there be a villain? Personally i dont think so. But there should be antagonists and conflicts. Remember that conflicts arent always person vs person, but im thinking since there are bad guys in our stories, they may cause some trouble...
4. Which characters? Okay so im thinking everyone. It sounds like a lot but im thinking we only send in a few at first. As the story grows more and more characters join.
5. So theyre going to get sucked into and land in different areas of the city. Now I think this is really interesting idea, but what if the "city" has different areas in different stories? Like sections of Tortuga or Star City or Pandora would be in this mysterious land. and it wont all be city too theres probably gonna be more. Anyway they land in their respective zones and eventually find their way into others. Or something. But then theres the ring of a bell, and the party house i was talking about appears. So the characters would all go there to investigate.
Ok, anyway, heres the deal:
First of all are you going to join the crossover now, or at a later time.
Second, which characters will you be starting off with?
Third, which chapter/episode/part do they come from (so, which chapter are they getting transported from because for example if Orbit from the Obelisk comes from Chapter 90 before Moonbeam died then to Chapter 95 when she died 😢😢, theyre basically two diff versions who have gone through different things)
Ok thats all
Ben, like I said I’d love to do a collab, and yea we could just ignore the animal human thing or maybe explain it somehow, like maybe the characters are all pulled to a certain ark and they can communicate regardless of species, I’d also be kinda cool if we used side characters instead of our main characters because then we could do what we want in the story without restrictions of like everyone has to live and escape said ark, and we could just explore a bit more character depth, like maybe from my story, Sheeri the ice wyvern, Uhh Xu? Maybe that featherless drake that allegedly died in HoP.. ok I don’t have too many side characters.. ooh maybe the jerboa and morelotops from the oasis. I really don’t have too many characters who haven’t joined the group or died or were villains.. also if we are gonna do this we need a tips section to plan the basic layout of the story and who will write what chapters, maybe we could take turns writing the same or similar events just from the POV of our characters or something like that?
Anyway I’m totally down for this, we’d also need a villain.. new one? An already made villain from one of our stories? Hmm…
-Wyvernain
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