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What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
The hills were left quiet,
And im in hiding.
Little Rabbit Boy
Chapter 2
Written by PD
The hills were tranquil as possible, small snickers from wild waters spat and writhed around the hills, splitting them into two. A small group of little beasts stood at the bank, taking their fill, before skittering off.
“ALEX!”
The same voice shouted again, as the boy flinched, his hands instinctually covering his face using his straw hood he had woven himself. Their solution was a lie, he repeated, Nobody deserves to die.
He hid in the long grass, obscured by its tall height, almost towering over him protectively. Shrinking back into the shadows, he waited. For the silhouettes of black to dissipate.
His eyesight was covered a bit, by the long grass. It’s straw like, dried texture rustled gently in the slow breeze, walking around to find Alex. It ruffled his hood, as he grumbled, the water nearby giggling and gurgling downstream.
Moon Tales
Season 1 - Episode 1
the girl let out a gasp of air as she woke up. the girl looked around for a second confused. She let out a groan and got up from the ground rubbing the back of her head. “where am i” the girl asked as she spit out sand. she walked around and then found a dodo bird. “hi there” she said, reaching down to pet it. the dodo was happy. the girl got angry. “it’s threatening me” the girl punched the dodo in the face and it got knocked out. the girl felt super bad after that. the girl did not know what dodos ate. “i will find a way to help don’t worry” but as the girl walked around she suddenly heard a call. “what was that” then a dilo came and spit green stuff on her. the girl screamed and began to run away. but as she did she remembered the dodo. “oh no i have to get it” she ran back but as she did she saw some body had killed the dilo. she was confused. “who are you” the girl asked. the guy turned around. he was carrying a spear and he had some cloth on. “oh hi i’m…”
hello my name is Moon Tales Girl and i am writing a new series called Moon Tales enjoy the next episode is in next section
im sorry for posting the same chapter again but i used my cousins phone to write the first chapter but since i am writing on my phone now i would like to post again because then the storys will be on the same account
Okay, so this was going to be my review of Ark: Lost Colony. But I simply cannot make this. I simply cannot make it in depth as I want to without breaking my own respects and rules I have for this community. And the furtherest I will simply say is that while the map, creatures and actual gameplay of Lost Colony are superb, the music is amazing. And if I was reviewing those. This would be a 10/10 DLC. But, for me, the lore and especially the end cutscene, make me angry and disgusted at Wildcard and Ark in general. The lore is average at best and bad at worst, and the cutscene of the Lost Queen’s introduction is simply not watchable for Teens, especially Kids, and I would say Adults as well. Do not watch her introduction. Or simply skip all of the end cutscenes until you defeat her. I genuinely cannot say it enough that it is disgusts and enrages me.
Anyway, this is my review. The overall feeling of Lost Colony for me is 6/10 or a 5/10. Legit music, gameplay, creatures, and the map are carrying it with 10/10 on all of those. The lore is 4 or 5/10, the cutscenes up until the end are 5/10, while the end cutscenes are -10/10. Do not watch the end cutscenes.
Yeah, that’s my review. I have a lot of mixed feelings, and I hate the end cutscenes.
Until Next Time.
-PrimalApex
HI PEOPLE!!!! my name is BRIA. I actually checked in a few months ago, asking everyone here how they didn't lose their spotlight! Thank you for responding Greatest Fan! (unique name. I get it though!) i feel like i won't be forgotten again...
My new unique original story Under Nirvana - An ARK is in Wyvern! It's an ARK story. Cool, right?
I saw Sunny's story/series Mysteries of the Owls and I thought it was really cool, so I wanted to make mmy own story too. I also saw UltimateApex's story Primum and I thought that was neat too! Anwyay sorry for yapping. I just think this community here on an app for a game about dinosaurs and mythical creatures on a desert is something ive always been interested in :) i hope to hear from you all soon!
Love, Bria
This is YOUR
Daily dose of peak ark players in action.
Person: *builds pistol*
Person: “Im unstoppable!”
Person: *walks into bug&onc infested cave*
YOU HAVE CONTACTED HIGHLY CONTAGIOUS MEGA RAIBYS.
Persons tribe mate:
YOU HAVE CONTACTED HIGHLY CONTAGIOUS MEGA RAIBYS.
Person: *dies*
Tribemate: *dies*
“A song of compys and gigas” Chap 1
It was a dark and cold night in the redwoods... and by the old waterfall ruins there was a small group of people sitting down by the river. These 10 men are high up in the sever totem pole, there riot and ascendet flak proves it. They talk in muffled voices as if there being hunted. However they are not the strongest on the sever... On this very same night INV looks out from his stronghold on the volcano. Ever since driving out previous alphas three months ago INV rules the sever with an iron fist. He is hated across the sever for the genoside of beach bobs and the weekend purges he athourises. Rebellions have always plagued his rule but each one ended in failure.... but then men in the redwoods think they have a strategy... the men at the redwoods are not just normal players... there the severs only hope for freedom and they are meeting to discuss the death of INV....
Cya on the next dossier!
BOB
<:NEXUS:>
Anyone like WOF (Wings of Fire) those of you who don’t… ok… fine with me… but those of you who DO, please go to gamma dragon trophy, there, is my new WOF fan club (for people who like Dinos, AND dragons) and I have no clue what WOF is… I just now learned about it… so I kinda… have no clue what I’m doing…
I've been thinking of a story and I think I might share a bit of it. I'm not the best writer so it won't be good but if you like it let me know and I may continue.
The ground shook. Dusk looked around for the cause along with the other raptors. The shaking abruptly stopped and it was quiet.
"HELP!!!!" A Raptor shrieked as they were seized by heavy jaws and thrown across the opening into the forest. A Giant Creature stepped out of the jungle. It roared, sending many raptors into panic. Many raptors ran to take down the threat. Dusk did not think he would be one of them, but the next moment he was biting down on the creatures tail.
The creature shook its tail repeatedly until finally Dusk was flung hard onto the ground in the forest. He began to get up but the ground shook and fell beneath him. He fell into the giant cave, filled with life and dinosaurs. Then he landed. Everything went black around him.
-Lynx
Evolution prologue
Ugh. Phoenix groaned as he stood up.
Where… where am I. An… an island
He said as he felt a pinching feeling on his ankle he turned around only to see a little bird nibbling on his ankle.
What are you? He asked Phoenix had never seen a bird like this before.
And then in the corner of his eye he saw a small lizard like creature running towards him as it spit in his face.
Ahhhhh!!! He screamed as the creature started biting his ankle.
Then a tall short haired man came running towards him with what looked like a spear in his hands.
Help!!!! Phoenix screamed.
And then Phoenix blacked out.
Hope you guys like the story
-Nugget
The terrible demise of tortuga.
Prologue 1.
Jack lay in his bunk bed tossing and turning trying to sleep but he couldn’t. Finally he rolled to the edge of the bed and stuck his head down to his twin brother Jay who lay “sleeping”in the bottom bunk bed. “Jay? You awake?” Jack whispered. Jay lay still for a second then turned to face Jack. “How could I sleep with you tossing up there.” Jay said. Jack smirked at him. “Fine, whenever we move into our new house you can have the top bunk as long as you let me come up there sometimes.” Jack said. They crept out of their beds and snuck past their sleeping mother, older sister, and younger brother and sister. They climbed up the ladder to the deck of the boat. There steering the ship was their father Aragorn. Aragorn had shoulder length jet black hair and dark chocolatey brown eyes. His skin was tanned from standing in the sun. He wore black clothes regardless of the heat of the sun. As soon as they came up from the trapdoor he spotted them. “Hi dad.” They said in unison. “Hello boys.” Aragorn said. “Is that the island were going to?” Jay asked pointing to a Island a few miles away. Aragorn nodded. “Yep, that is.”
On the dock of the island was a woman with a black uniform, a gun over her shoulder, and a dagger hanging from her belt. She had long blonde hair that was hanging in a braid down her back and stern green eyes. She held in her hand a walkie-talkie which she was talking into. She was one of the few guards of the city or “peacemakers” as they where called. A short distance away was a man with a black uniform, and a hood that was over his head. On his belt hung a large axe and a long sniper gun strapped to his back. He had black hair and cold,calculating brown eyes. He was the executioner of the town. He as well was holding a walkie-talkie “I see their ship.” The woman said. “Good, I’ll radio to the mayor.” The executioner said, fingering his axe. He walked over to the telephone and dialed the mayor’s number. (Hey it’s the old days, they used telephones.)“Hello.” The voice on the other side said. “It’s me one of the future mayors.” Said the voice. It was one of the mayors sons. “I’m trying to talk to the CURRENT mayors NOT the FUTURE mayors. The executioner said. “Oh.” Said the mayors son. “DAD! MOM! THE EXECUTIONER IS CALLING!” He shouted at the top of his lungs. The executioner clapped his hands on his ears. A few seconds passed then the mayors answered. The mayors were called Mayor Roi(king in French ) and Mayor Reine(queen in French ). They had three triplet sons and three triplet daughters. “Hello?” Said Mayor Roi. “The new family is almost here.” Said the executioner. “Good, we’ll be there to…welcome them.” Said Mayor Reine.
That was the First intro for the story. Hope y’all enjoyed. The story will be in the all filter in abc order starting here in achatina. Also this story is a collab between me and my friend MrGhost Gamer. ✌️
-SunnyFox57.
SpecialRaptor, there are a lot of words I use or try to use instead of using said (I never used replies, but I have used replied on several occasions). Plenty, and it mostly depends on what emotion I want to express, how the character behaves, or even what the character is. Like for instance, I use growled, snarled, hissed, squawked, roared, screeched and so on for creature characters along with other normal means I use.
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*brings in a character for reference*
“Like Nightfall, the Troodon from Journey.” I say. Nightfall screeches in Argentavis as he stamps his claws.
“Come on Apex!!! I was just about to eat some nice Morellotops BBQ!!!” Nightfall hissed. I roll my eyes at the overdramatic creature.
“Look, I’m just bringing you here as an example to show someone how I write my stories like what words to add after a character speaks. And how I write characters and to explain that it’s really up to the person to decide how they want to write.”
“Oh… well, sorry for snapping.” Nightfall said. There was an awkward silence between me and Nightfall as we sat in the white void.
“Well, have you told this person yet that you can also just not add any extra word dialogue if two characters are involved a longer a deeper discussion between two characters?” Nightfall suggested. I shook my head.
“No, I was going to get to that though.”
“Well, you might tell this person that you should always make sure that you mention the person who speaks in the unclaimed dialogue prior to the dialogue occurring.” Nightfall added. I nodded my head as he said this.
“Yes, I’ll make sure I say that.” There was another moment of silence as both sat there.
“So, when is the next Journey chapter coming out.” Nightfall asked.
“I dunno yet. Maybe in a couple weeks.” I answered. Nightfall looked at me like I killed someone.
“A COUPLE WEEKS!!” Nightfall growled. “It’s already been a few months!!” He screeched. I rolled my eyes and sighed.
“I’ve got writer’s block, okay? I gotta break through it before I can write anything.” I said. He looked at me with a disappointed look.
“But everyone’s waiting on what happens next, AND THE READERS WANT TO SEE MORE OF ME!!!” Nightfall squawked. I glared at him. Nightfall just grinned back.
“Why don’t you ever write me like this in Journey?”
“Alright, time for you to go.” I said. Nightfall’s eyes widened.
“Now hold on. Wait just a second! I—”
“Nope, no more seconds…” I interject as I send Nightfall back to where he belongs.
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Anyway, that’s kind of how I write a creature in my creature based story. But I also use a bunch more. And plenty more for human POV stories too. I use words like shouted, screamed, cackled, chuckled, groaned, moaned, yelled, whispered, whimpered, cried, lashed out, retorted and a lot more. I also use adjectives added onto said like “said arrogantly” and so on. Or you can always add an action with it. Like “he said continuing to look for the diamond ring” and “she said gritting her teeth.”.
For sprucing up your story, maybe just describing more around the characters. Or even describe the characters a bit. If we’re reading from Troop’s POV. Describe Ziggy and how he looks or visa versa. Or small features of each of them.
Or when describing time differences, you don don’t have to add parentheses. Like instead of (The scene is no longer daytime, welcoming the night), write—
As Ziggy searches the Redwood forest, time passes quicker than it seemed to be. With minutes becoming hours. Without even realizing it, Ziggy found himself in dark but comforting arms of the night.
It says the same thing, but it goes more into describing. And you can take it further too. But again, most of this is my opinion. Writing is an art style and everyone has their own unique perspective and way to write. And I’m probably not the best writer to give advice. Ben is a great writer who can probably give a lot more tips if you need them.
Honestly, your story isn’t bad plot wise do far, or even poorly written. The word “said” is one of those words that is kinda vital of having a lot of in a story. But it sounds repetitive. I’ve already seen you use a lot of alternative words for said though in chapter one. So the most I can say is just try to avoid using the word “then” outside of dialogue itself. Always make sure the story can be read easily and understood by the reader, take a few steps in their shoes as you write. And just try to make your chapters bigger if you can. You don’t have to, most of the time writing will gradually get longer as you get more and more acclimated to writing. And if you read other people’s stories or even author’s books. That can help you understand what you should do in situations you’re having trouble with.
But, so far, you’re doing just fine SpecialRaptor!!! Also, I’d suggest using Grammarly if you are worried about Grammar and punctuation. I use it to go over my drafts and I read along and even change by adding or removing scenes from my chapters as I correct any grammatical mistakes.
Anyway, I think that’s it for now.
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
REAWAKEN CHAP 2: The March
‘Ready The Reapers !’ his voice called out through the stables as riders muzzled and dragged forwards the behemoths , they all kicked and bit until Aeron’s shadow followed , how ever as you see Aeron’s shadow being scary wasn’t a metaphor ; behind him lurked a Reaper King - Hades - it had been selected for one purpose , inflicting pain - Hades was about 20% larger than most , he had a black carapace with a dark blue under bellies - light blue veins pierced the darkness of his chitinous hide his eyes burning the same ice blue , no other reaper dared to meet his gaze , the pupiless eyes rotating slowly searching for weakness . Handlers moved to attention locking salutes as he strode past - Aeron and his monster’s reputation was everywhere
‘ Yessir ‘ men had started to climb up the beasts , using the messor rex’s leg spikes as hand holds , perching on the saddleless backs
‘ March out through the nexus and meet at the portal , ‘ Aeron’s tek suit deployed from his specimen implant covering his short blonde hair and tall frame ‘ Redirect to The Scorched Earth Portal and wait - I’ll go first you follow ½ an hour later ‘
Aeron’s soldiers saluted and shouted their conformations in unison , he had only taken the best of the best with him to the corrupted ark and these were those men for good and bad , Elite unmoving and broken - they had stared down the twisted form of the red zone and now they marched , parading through the streets , over smooth concrete made flawless by roman limestone , citizens gathered at the edges of the pavement , watching and cheering as the soldiers and false king that protected them, moved; reapers heads held high , soldiers marching in their tek - Aeron tilted his helmet to the crowds - he knew he would return , but his troops did not have such the luxury , for all they knew the summon would be their last.
lol!! No Pastel, I wasn’t trying to call you out. But you were the one who coined the term of “Lurking” here, so it’s just the term we use when we just read posts and don’t write anything back. lol!! Also, I love that for any medium of time passing in here. Pastel lurking within the shadows is always going to be a constant.
Also, to whoever wrote that post saying you don’t need an email to make a fandom account. You’re wrong. You do in fact need an email. Totally wasn’t me btw, totally not me misremembering… totally not…
Anyway, SpecialRaptor, I hope you can!!! We have a blast in there and it’s always nice to get another person to join the chaos!!!
Also, I read your two chapters!!!! It’s great so far!!!!! I love Ziggy and Troop!!! They’re so fun!!! And I can’t wait to see what adventures Troop and Ziggy go on!!!!
Sylveevee, that’s awesome!!! Can’t wait to read the remake of QOA!!!!
Anyway, Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
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