Sunnyfox, I can see why you called it The House of Madness. I read both chapters, and I really enjoyed them both!!!! I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!! Hailey seems to be a very interesting character! I’m definitely excited to see what’s in store for this character!
Ben, it’s fine, take as long as you need. I can’t wait to read it!! Also I think Sunny might’ve hinted what Edward’s power is in chapter two. It might be Super Strength as she states he throws the heavy throne at Krakos Tom and thrones aren’t really that light to begin with. So it might be that it’s Super Strength, but I’m just guessing and not at all sure on this.
Arks Over Heaven Chapter 30 might take a little bit longer to come out compared to the previous ones, it’s going to be very very special and may or may not have some scenes in there that are going to require a lot of care and thought put into. Soo perhaps expect Chapter 30 out by Saturday or Sunday. Sorry about that, but trust me that this chapter is going to be great!
Woah, I guess you are right PrimalApex… if Sunny confirms it herself. I thought that when Tom said that it just meant he was smart and he kind of understood James’ feelings… but in that chapter I realize that he said he was going to “convince” their parents to visit one last time, that sort of makes sense now. However I wonder what the Krakos has to do with this? They are beings created by extreme anger. And also I’m wondering if Tom’s power makes him sick? Well it does, right, but to what extreme?
Sandmaster, Chapter 13 was super cool! Nice work showing what species the inspectors were, although the Rock Drake part confused me (even though this scene was super awesome!). What does it mean by they know they’re lying? Lying about what, going on the ship? I don’t really understand this part, can you please clarify? Well the Shadowmane, Eclipse sounds pretty cool, and I wonder how Fuzzball’s going to get out of this. He needs to hurry fast so he can save his family… Well I’ll be waiting for Chapter 14!
Also SunnyFox I somehow didn’t see the Prologue of TOHM in Fenrisulfr, I guess I just skipped past it or something. Whoopsie daisy. Mmm, interesting, a first person perspective story is always a lot of fun to read and write. I spent a year working on a 1st person perspective once and I’ve grown fond of it, I connect with the main character more tbh. So let’s see here… main character is Hailey and she’s gone a bit mad which is why it’s called House of Madness, neat! Also has a Hyaenodon named Brutus… A Hyaenodon’s Scar reference? Nyeh heh heh. Also the dream she has, I think that’s supposed to be Tortuga, isn’t it? The square is the town square, and that house is the boat house that the Buckleshoot family sail away in. Now I’m just wondering how Hailey dreams this…
Also Chapter 1 really shows how crazy Hailey is… schizophrenic? Her reflection talks back to her, and Brutus talks. And I wonder what Marv’s relation is. Butler? Sounds like it. And I wonder what his real name is. And Hailey’s father seems like a king, although I don’t think it’s Tom, Tom would never marry someone else he loved Leah too much. Probably someone new. Also Hailey’s design reminds me of like a reverse Enid Sinclair, that one character from Wednesday Addams show.
And Chapter 2… DANG! Tom just killed his father! And probably his mother too. Which is kind of sad, his mother didn’t really do anything wrong, it was his father. And I guess we’ll never know Edward’s medallion power 😞. I don’t blame him for killing his father, his father didn’t necessarily CARE about them, he just wanted him and James to be king. And for some reason now they want Tom to not be king? I’d be upset as well. Tom doesn’t need to go through all this. So unless he’s been doing some actual villainous stuff and hurting innocents, I stand by the fact that Tom didn’t really do anything wrong. And since Jenny is still alive, I wonder if we’ll see her in the future.
That was nice reading, nice chapters everyone! Later!
Hi Reader!! It has been a long time!! I have kept up with your story and I am enjoying it!! I just haven’t replied back in a while. A lot has happened, Moon computer died and had to pause writing for a bit. But she’s back. I had to change my name from Apex to PrimalApex. And several other things and a lot of stories. I’m sorry that I haven’t responded to you in a while. Hope you can forgive me about that.
Fun Fact of Arks Over Heaven: Samuel does not have a favorite color, favorite food, or favorite anything. Neddy’s favorite color is green and his favorite food is Udon noodles. Ruby’s favorite color is red and her favorite food is bacon. Aurora’s favorite color is blue and her favorite food is lasagna. Ben’s favorite color is monochrome and his favorite food is tacos.
SunnyFox, I’d say you’re a good detective, so don’t say that about yourself! You did manage to find out who- whoops, almost said something there. But I CANT say it because that would spoil the fun. Yet. But I guess I’m close, right? Aragorn does mean noble valor after all. That sounds pretty noble to me. Well I’m almost there, that’s all that matters.
Wyvernian Chapter 27 of PoP located in Eurypterid was a lot of fun to read, it was fun seeing everyone unite to defeat the Magmasaurs! It’s nice that Bones is doing well, however the Wanderer makes me curious… Is it even a human, what if it’s Salizar? Eh, probably not. Also the Magmasaur Matriarch sounds like a kick-butt type of villain. I bet she would wipe the floor with the Ice Wyvern easily. And the war buckets to use water to defeat the Magmasaurs was a really smart idea. However, I think you may have misspelled disturbers… unless that’s intentional.
SunnyFox, jeez so much happened in Chapter 27 and 28 that I don’t know what to say!
Actually, nevermind, I do know what to say, I’m just so speechless! First of all Cole, WHY are you trying to propose to her come on like you’ve known her for a while but you haven’t even DTF yet! (determine the relationship). Like y’all haven’t even kissed yet… And did you not even notice Arianna’s tears? How DARE you. Well. Sorry old pal, I think you just need to be more situationally aware.
Also I can’t believe Irene got hit with a stroke! It cannot be. Poor Arianna is losing so many people!
Chapter 28… man it’s so sweet how both James and Arianna are thinking about each other. Also what is Tom trying to ask Leah? 😳 Also a dog barking just reminded me what happened to Bella the dog? Who is taking care of her? Also the kiss scene was cool, but definitely not as good as Tom and Leah’s. Now I’m no genius when it comes to kiss scenes, but I think there either needs to be A. a build up, or B. intensity that is unrivaled.
For example, here’s how I’d write this scene: “Well, we convinced our parents to let us visit one last time. After all… There was a really special girl I met,” James said. A bright smile began to grow on Arianna’s face, one she couldn’t contain, no matter how hard she tried, “Oh James… I love you!”
The moment was unbearable, as time seemed to slow to a halt, the two stared at each other’s lips, until finally, they leaned together at the same time…
And then it was happening. The two closed eyes and began to kiss like it was no tomorrow. Arianna’s heart hammered against her chest, a rosy red rising through her face as she felt herself clasping the back of James’ head. The moment felt so forever, but not foreign. And Arianna craved it with all her heart.
James waited for Arianna to pull away, but once she did, James wanted to show her something…
That’s just one example. You don’t have to go THAT crazy, but it just felt a lot more anticlimatic compared to the other. This is supposed to be the big moment, so make it big!
Or not. It doesn’t really matter.
Where was I? OH NAH. Shadow Phoenix is the name of the kingdom James and Tom’s parents rule, okay okay that makes sense. I guess I didn’t think of something like that, I thought it’d be some crazy secret organization or something. Also zamn James just beat Cole to it huh?
Also James’ power is not just using his shadow, but controlling others? That’s super powerful if used correctly. That’s like seven billion shadows on the whim. Well maybe not that many, this is after Arks.
Also the medallions cause people to live long amounts of time? Hmm. I wonder how much time passed from TTOTSP and TTDOT. Years, decades, centuries?
And looking back at this now… Will COLE have something to do with Tom’s transformation?
We are nearing Chapter 30 of TTOTSP. That was pretty much the amount of chapters TTDOT has, so I think it’s safe to say the climax is reaching… James seems to be with Arianna now and what else left is there?
Fun things to talk about. Well on the flip side! And I guess I’m going to work on Chapter 29… Oh man this one is going to be so much fun to make!
Sunnyfox, Journey is a sequel to The Obelisk in ways. I really don’t want to spoil anything just yet but I say a few things. It is an alternate universe and will follow the Five on a journey. It will start being posted after the Obelisk is finished, but I will be showing something soon to show off one of the new characters. It will have some new characters and a fair number of the characters in the Obelisk right now. And it will also involve the rune. I think that’s all l’m gonna say right now but I will say more soon. Until next time!
Well, well, well Ben looks like u got it all figured it out, huh? Well, I won’t tell u who it is, so u probably need to get more…concrete evidence. But good guess. You should be a detective. I’m a terrible guesser and detective. Anyways…cya!