(I found and read the story)
(I found and read the story)
Just a few tips from me to make it a better story;
1: NEVER SAY 1 2 3 4 5 6 AND SO ON! Say one, two, three, four.. You get it? It treats it like a professional story.
2: Make long chapters! If you have the shortening glitch if you make it too long, make the tip a funny tip and go back to the story tip.
3: Use dialogue! You've been treating it like you recalling from the past, but use descriptive words along with the speaking.
4: Use paragraphs for long chapters! Incase something bad happens, make a
Drop
Like
This. Only you should also have
Indents like this.
With 2-4 spaces between the wall of the tip with the letters.
5: Describe the surroundings. What did the base look like? What did the cliff look like? How many were in each tribe?
6:Overall.. Nice story!
-Seasnake