To: New Author of New Story

From: Ben

Hey there. We never got a username from you, so I don’t know what to call you yet. Nor a name for your story, so I’m not sure what to call that either, but I liked it. Jannie is a cool character, I like how she seems kind of Aussie (or is it British?). She seems nice. It is sad she got captured by what looks like the Alpha tribe. I wonder if some people in that tribe were the people / “friends” that betrayed Bob in the past life. The Redwood Crew in Chapter 3 sounds cool too, they probably have all sorts of redwood tames like Diplodocus, Terror birds, and dire bears. I think it’d be helpful to give names to the survivors that are with Bob right now though, the ones in Jannie’s tribe and the one in the Redwood Crew. Overall the story seems fun now and I like it!