From Ben

Welcome OMEGA09! I’m guessing your name is derived from JWTG? Very cool. I’m glad you enjoy The Arks: Over Heaven! Guess that’s another fan of TAOH. Anyway I hope you stick around long. It’s really nice here. If you have any questions feel free to ask me or anyone else here whether it be about stories or whatever else. By the way, you can view story tips / messages faster using the D0d0dex Stories website. Search it up on a web browser, click on the link, filter by newest, and refresh to see the most recent tips very quickly compared to the app. You’ll still have to send messages by the app. By the way, the Tree Moose mod will be on Ascended according to the creator (GitezGood).

Hello Ember to Achatina section! I remember your story: My Life as an ARK Noob, right? Anyway glad you’ve decided to come around hopefully stick around too. If you continue your story again I’ll be around to read it. Uhhh what else? Oh yeah, you can view story tips / messages faster using the D0d0dex Stories website. Search it up on a web browser, click on the link, filter by newest, and refresh to see the most recent tips very quickly compared to the app. You’ll still have to send messages by the app.

GitezGood, I just read Chapter 8 Part 2 of TFoF. You did pretty good with the backstories of Scarlet and you implied that she has some sort of tormentors. The dialogue between the wyverns during their meal was also a nice touch to the story. These little moments make the characters stand out and shine brighter. Scarlet’s outrage toward Amber was also really well done. To me, I’m not sure I like Amber. You did good, you can keep practicing this sort of method to writing out characters, mostly with Febreeze, Coal, and the other wyverns but i’m sure you’ve got it down in the next few chapters. Here is a bit more advice if you’re willing to read:

Little actions: If you want to express characters’ emotions you can have them do certain actions to signify in a subtle way, without necessarily having to use dialogue. Having the build up just makes it more suspenseful. Like when Coal is saying how he likes the food, you can have him chewing on it while saying it, and maybe he likes it so much that meat juice is dribbling down his wyvern chin. It gives the story even more spark and especially the characters. Or if a character is nervous, their eyes can squint and they can sweat or something.

Pacing: The pacing is just how fast the story is being moved along. Usually you want the pacing to be fast during a fight scene but slow during dialogue. You can try to slow it down during dialogue moments, if you know what I mean. That way, the readers can absorb the dialogue and information provided better.

I suppose that’s it. You’ve improved great lengths so far since Chapter 8 Part 1 already! (Also wow 6 parts for Chapter 9 that’s a lot).

Sunny, I read Chapter 21 of TLW and it was amazing! Rowan’s nightmare just gave me the lead I needed with the Prophecy at the beginning of the story! So it seems to me that the five people the prophecy were talking about were Rowan, Cedric, Oliver, Elayne, and Kannon. Interesting indeed. I also believe by the look of it, Rowan is going to split off from the group and survive on her own (as she should… besides Oliver she’s the only one doing much work). Cedric and Rowan’s argument about whether or not William to go was also really cool. I love Cedric’s opinion. Even though he doesn’t respect William by the looks of it, he still cares about him. Still though splitting up is not a good idea. William should come, but he doesn’t necessarily need to participate in the fighting if there is any. Liv can watch over him while the five take care of it (also Liv should NOT be fighting she is like eight years old). Also wow so William heard some of the Master’s goons walking above too, which is weird because if they have control over the ARK wouldn’t they be able to just collect him? Maybe they aren’t as powerful as they seem. Anyway I can’t wait to see how TLW goes. Also still curious about Sunny fox and her role in this.

PrimalApex, Chapter 50 of TOT was phenomenal! Wow we’ve made it that far. Anyway, Andrew’s transformation to the Herald of Light was awesome and definitely what I was expecting for Drain’s opposite! I’m not too sure what else to say. Oh yeah, I’m also wondering what Star was doing with the terminal. I dont’ know if that’s up for me to decide. Probably is but please confirm anyway. Anyway it was an amazing chapter I also like the characters included. Well this means MrGhostGamer is up. I’m guessing he’ll do another Rockwell POV or something. Yeah that’s about it see ya’ll later.