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What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
SpecialRaptor, there are a lot of words I use or try to use instead of using said (I never used replies, but I have used replied on several occasions). Plenty, and it mostly depends on what emotion I want to express, how the character behaves, or even what the character is. Like for instance, I use growled, snarled, hissed, squawked, roared, screeched and so on for creature characters along with other normal means I use.
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*brings in a character for reference*
“Like Nightfall, the Troodon from Journey.” I say. Nightfall screeches in Argentavis as he stamps his claws.
“Come on Apex!!! I was just about to eat some nice Morellotops BBQ!!!” Nightfall hissed. I roll my eyes at the overdramatic creature.
“Look, I’m just bringing you here as an example to show someone how I write my stories like what words to add after a character speaks. And how I write characters and to explain that it’s really up to the person to decide how they want to write.”
“Oh… well, sorry for snapping.” Nightfall said. There was an awkward silence between me and Nightfall as we sat in the white void.
“Well, have you told this person yet that you can also just not add any extra word dialogue if two characters are involved a longer a deeper discussion between two characters?” Nightfall suggested. I shook my head.
“No, I was going to get to that though.”
“Well, you might tell this person that you should always make sure that you mention the person who speaks in the unclaimed dialogue prior to the dialogue occurring.” Nightfall added. I nodded my head as he said this.
“Yes, I’ll make sure I say that.” There was another moment of silence as both sat there.
“So, when is the next Journey chapter coming out.” Nightfall asked.
“I dunno yet. Maybe in a couple weeks.” I answered. Nightfall looked at me like I killed someone.
“A COUPLE WEEKS!!” Nightfall growled. “It’s already been a few months!!” He screeched. I rolled my eyes and sighed.
“I’ve got writer’s block, okay? I gotta break through it before I can write anything.” I said. He looked at me with a disappointed look.
“But everyone’s waiting on what happens next, AND THE READERS WANT TO SEE MORE OF ME!!!” Nightfall squawked. I glared at him. Nightfall just grinned back.
“Why don’t you ever write me like this in Journey?”
“Alright, time for you to go.” I said. Nightfall’s eyes widened.
“Now hold on. Wait just a second! I—”
“Nope, no more seconds…” I interject as I send Nightfall back to where he belongs.
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Anyway, that’s kind of how I write a creature in my creature based story. But I also use a bunch more. And plenty more for human POV stories too. I use words like shouted, screamed, cackled, chuckled, groaned, moaned, yelled, whispered, whimpered, cried, lashed out, retorted and a lot more. I also use adjectives added onto said like “said arrogantly” and so on. Or you can always add an action with it. Like “he said continuing to look for the diamond ring” and “she said gritting her teeth.”.
For sprucing up your story, maybe just describing more around the characters. Or even describe the characters a bit. If we’re reading from Troop’s POV. Describe Ziggy and how he looks or visa versa. Or small features of each of them.
Or when describing time differences, you don don’t have to add parentheses. Like instead of (The scene is no longer daytime, welcoming the night), write—
As Ziggy searches the Redwood forest, time passes quicker than it seemed to be. With minutes becoming hours. Without even realizing it, Ziggy found himself in dark but comforting arms of the night.
It says the same thing, but it goes more into describing. And you can take it further too. But again, most of this is my opinion. Writing is an art style and everyone has their own unique perspective and way to write. And I’m probably not the best writer to give advice. Ben is a great writer who can probably give a lot more tips if you need them.
Honestly, your story isn’t bad plot wise do far, or even poorly written. The word “said” is one of those words that is kinda vital of having a lot of in a story. But it sounds repetitive. I’ve already seen you use a lot of alternative words for said though in chapter one. So the most I can say is just try to avoid using the word “then” outside of dialogue itself. Always make sure the story can be read easily and understood by the reader, take a few steps in their shoes as you write. And just try to make your chapters bigger if you can. You don’t have to, most of the time writing will gradually get longer as you get more and more acclimated to writing. And if you read other people’s stories or even author’s books. That can help you understand what you should do in situations you’re having trouble with.
But, so far, you’re doing just fine SpecialRaptor!!! Also, I’d suggest using Grammarly if you are worried about Grammar and punctuation. I use it to go over my drafts and I read along and even change by adding or removing scenes from my chapters as I correct any grammatical mistakes.
Anyway, I think that’s it for now.
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
lol!! No Pastel, I wasn’t trying to call you out. But you were the one who coined the term of “Lurking” here, so it’s just the term we use when we just read posts and don’t write anything back. lol!! Also, I love that for any medium of time passing in here. Pastel lurking within the shadows is always going to be a constant.
Also, to whoever wrote that post saying you don’t need an email to make a fandom account. You’re wrong. You do in fact need an email. Totally wasn’t me btw, totally not me misremembering… totally not…
Anyway, SpecialRaptor, I hope you can!!! We have a blast in there and it’s always nice to get another person to join the chaos!!!
Also, I read your two chapters!!!! It’s great so far!!!!! I love Ziggy and Troop!!! They’re so fun!!! And I can’t wait to see what adventures Troop and Ziggy go on!!!!
Sylveevee, that’s awesome!!! Can’t wait to read the remake of QOA!!!!
Anyway, Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
<:NEXUS:>
Anyone like WOF (Wings of Fire) those of you who don’t… ok… fine with me… but those of you who DO, please go to gamma dragon trophy, there, is my new WOF fan club (for people who like Dinos, AND dragons) and I have no clue what WOF is… I just now learned about it… so I kinda… have no clue what I’m doing…
Forget the illustration stuff, I don’t think I have any way to post my drawings online on ibisPaint X due to restrictions. Sorry!
-specialraptor(zznake0)
If you have any questions, opinions, or suggestions for my newest story, feel free to ask me in raptor or troodon section! Tyvm.
Okay, so this was going to be my review of Ark: Lost Colony. But I simply cannot make this. I simply cannot make it in depth as I want to without breaking my own respects and rules I have for this community. And the furtherest I will simply say is that while the map, creatures and actual gameplay of Lost Colony are superb, the music is amazing. And if I was reviewing those. This would be a 10/10 DLC. But, for me, the lore and especially the end cutscene, make me angry and disgusted at Wildcard and Ark in general. The lore is average at best and bad at worst, and the cutscene of the Lost Queen’s introduction is simply not watchable for Teens, especially Kids, and I would say Adults as well. Do not watch her introduction. Or simply skip all of the end cutscenes until you defeat her. I genuinely cannot say it enough that it is disgusts and enrages me.
Anyway, this is my review. The overall feeling of Lost Colony for me is 6/10 or a 5/10. Legit music, gameplay, creatures, and the map are carrying it with 10/10 on all of those. The lore is 4 or 5/10, the cutscenes up until the end are 5/10, while the end cutscenes are -10/10. Do not watch the end cutscenes.
Yeah, that’s my review. I have a lot of mixed feelings, and I hate the end cutscenes.
Until Next Time.
-PrimalApex
A new series…
“AHHHHHHHHHHH—”
Full of new adventures.
“ZIG, RUN, RUN, RUN!!”
And lots of new discoveries.
Meet…
ZIGGY AND TROOP;
ADVENTURES OF TROOP THE TROODON.
The two, immature,
“ZIG, WHAT ARE YOU DOING??”
Most crazy,
“TROOP, WHATEVER YOU DO, TELL MY PARENTS I LOVE THEM!!”
And dramatic duo.
Both illustrated(ibisPaint X) and written by specialraptor(zznake0)
PROLOGUE OUT NOW!!!
“Troop?”
“Yes, Ziggy?”
“What are we running from, exactly?”
“…Oh.”
ADVENTURES OF TROOP THE TROODON, ONLY IN DODODEX
-specialraptor(zznake0)
HI PEOPLE!!!! my name is BRIA. I actually checked in a few months ago, asking everyone here how they didn't lose their spotlight! Thank you for responding Greatest Fan! (unique name. I get it though!) i feel like i won't be forgotten again...
My new unique original story Under Nirvana - An ARK is in Wyvern! It's an ARK story. Cool, right?
I saw Sunny's story/series Mysteries of the Owls and I thought it was really cool, so I wanted to make mmy own story too. I also saw UltimateApex's story Primum and I thought that was neat too! Anwyay sorry for yapping. I just think this community here on an app for a game about dinosaurs and mythical creatures on a desert is something ive always been interested in :) i hope to hear from you all soon!
Love, Bria
Forget what I said before, I will never stop writing my awesome probably amazing stories!! (Idk what you guys think, tell me ur opinions)
Just won’t be writing as much. 0u0
anyways hello moon and all the other people (PrimalApex, PD, SunnyFox, etc and etc)
-as always..
specialraptor(zznake0)
~{Dwellings}~ chapter 3
the digging continued for what felt to destiny like hours,
but he knew it was only for a few minutes. then they heard slamming footsteps growing distant, and a horrifying screech that probably traveled miles, they stayed still and silent for a few more minutes before nova let out a long sigh,
"Nova we need to talk-" Nova cut her off "Destiny i don’t want to talk about it!!” Destiny glared at her “It’s not about what you want nova! This isn’t just about you!”
“F-fine, what do you want to talk about?..” “what did you find in that cave nova, whatever it was it seems to have made the entire desert want us dead, and the redwoods too.” Destiny was staring at her firmly “we’re jerboa Destiny! Everything wants to eat us because we’re prey,” “but you know that it’s different now nova, we both know.” Destiny looked at her, but she was avoiding eye contact, “I found an artifact, a real one.”
-hope you enjoyed! Have a good day/night, eat drink water,and PEACE ✌️
Prologue to Journey through All Creatures
Before the survivors of ARK existed, there was the Creator. He created the survivors and brought them into the world, or should I say the Arks. Survivors had the freedom to do what they want, choose their own path. But some people wanted to be evil and take away freedom. And the Creator brought the Prime Heart, a powerful artifact that could control survivors. It could also create survivors and create hearts to control them. In the wrong hands, it could spell disaster. And in the wrong hands it was. People used it to create the Assassin Heart, an artifact connected to the Prime and survivors created by it. And using the Assassin Heart, a group of people created a tribe of these monsters with no freedom to do what they wanted, forced to follow the path they had been given. That group who made the heart wanted people in the Assassin Tribe, otherwise known as the C tribe. Survivors created by the heart itself were not able to leave the path they were given. If they died they couldn’t respawn. If the heart connected to the group it creates was destroyed, all survivors created by that heart would die off. But not people who joined that group. They wouldn’t die, but they would be free. People were forced into it. One survivor, Serenity, had her freedom taken away when she was forced to join the C tribe. She had almost no memories of her freedom, but she knew no one deserved this. She wanted people to be free. And when Soddon arrived, he would soon become the one…
Chapter 1 was released a few days ago. It’s in this section.
-RelatingHen8906