From Ben

MGG, to answer your question:

1. You create your own draft model, yes, so everyone's version is separate and solo from one another. If you mean create your own draft model as in story prompt, no (not yet at least). Im suppling them from donations.

2. Rules? Idk what this means. I already provided some for when you finish off the rest of the Draft Model.

3. Voting commences once everyone is done with their individual draft models but if someone takes too long we just vote without them. Youll still be able to finish a draft model if you take too long and publish it, and it will still be archived but you cant win Writer of the Week for that week and you gotta wait for your next chance in the next week

Ben,

Yay. I think it’s a great idea. I’ve never heard of a Draft Model, even when I was in fifth grade. I don’t know why though, Language Arts was my favorite subject, aside from History, not a fan of mathematics or science. (Why I am talking about this, I’m getting off subject) anyway I have a few questions about it. These are questions about things I either missed in your message or don’t understand.

Q#1: Do we each create our own Draft Model, or just finish off where others left off, like in a collab?

Q#2: Are there any other specific rules to creating a Draft Model?

Q#3: When will the voting commence? Is it once everyone is done with the stories?

That’s all I could think of right now…

Yours Truly,

MrGhostGamer

From Ben

Break-it i send it right now

Sunny, Chapter 2 of The Lost World was amazing! And pretty funny too. Looks like the school idea was taken into account, nice! Looks like Cedric’s getting shipped off, poor dude! (not really tho he burned his parents’ statue down..) And yes, basically just continue writing off the draft. Think of it like TOT.

Wyvernian, here’s the cast of villains that were picked and not brought in yet:

TAOH:

Queen June: This fiery woman has the implant attribute to control the flames (and also possesses immunity to it). Violent and vicious, merciless and cruel, she has no bounds to her immorality. She possesses no sentimental attachments to anyone except her dearest love, Ben (even though it’s extremely one sided). June will do anything to win his heart over, even if it means killing everyone she knows or taking over the world. If only she knew her efforts were in vain. She has orange-brown hair, very athletically toned, and wears red flak armor. Her preferred weapon is a pike (but as the story progresses, she starts to use the trident more often). She will be pulled out of TAOH after Chris is taken in, so Chapter 62, and at the moment she has not actually killed anyone.

Jerry: A deranged sadistic man who enjoys a good fight. His implant attribute allows him to blood bend. Jeez. His blood manipulation works in a very odd way; the weaker the individual is, the more blood he is allowed to control. While he prefers to dominate those around him and hurt and kill as many people as he can, good or evil, he holds high respect for those who are willing to fight back. He may even submit his loyalty to those stronger than him (which he did to Loki), but that would only be possible if he were defeated in battle. He has dead hair, doesn’t wear a shirt, and wears gray cloth pants and goes around bare foot. He also has a golden tooth which was knocked out in a fight with Maddox (who will soon be retconned into Chloe). He wears a gold cross necklace, but he isn’t Christian himself??? Lore reason. Uhh, and he will be pulled out of TAOH after he agreed to hunt down Bob and Alan for Loki, so right about after Chapter 59. At the moment he has killed numerous people, around a handful.

ROTP

Michael. Acts haughty and thinks he’s better than everyone else. Michael has dirt brown hair that is kneaded into very tight curly knots and has a horribly trimmed goatee. He likes to wear a tie suit. He will occasionally assume something that isn’t true.For example, in TTDOT, he accused Aragorn of keeping Emma away from him. Which is not true. Emma hates him. He’s desperately in love with Emma, who is revolted by him. He hates Aragorn and Aragorn hates him.

Willow. Has black hair usually up in a ponytail, green eyes, and tanned skin. Her implant gives her the ability to go through solid objects. She CANNOT go through people tho. She doesn’t like anyone who gets in her way. she is very mean when provoked.

PC

First nominee, the alpha dragon, he’s a dragon boss but due to Salizars hacking he was created as an unstoppable alpha, he’s not much bigger than the boss he’s just more durable and has a large radius in his fire breath, this may seem OP but one of Ben’s can bloodbend, Syls characters can shapeshift and then there’s Aragorn and Sheeri’s ice and Nova.. point is we’re no stranger to OP in TOT 😆. His colors are black with red accents. Also his behavior is not as hot headed as you’d think, he knows he’s deadly so he’s pretty cocky but not boasty about it more the calm deadly type, also he can be incredibly loyal as show with Salizar, who he sees as his father. Also when he comes to TOT he should strangle Drain and say, “YOU, where is father! Where are those creatures who bested me!” And then Drain explains he was probably killed and that they are from the same universe, also Drains main motive in HoP was to kill the alpha dragon and drink his blood to get element mutated, so don’t get to attached to the dragon because Drain may or may not betray him.. but probably may.

And for my second nominee.. I don’t have many villains in HoP and most of the PoP characters are still alive and it would be confusing to use them, also Vinestrap is lame 😂 so I’m going with his son, PRINCE CALDREN, Caldren is huge, he is dumb as a bag of rocks, classic muscly idiot. Also he is a hybrid of gigantopithicus and dinopithicus because his father wanted control over the gigantopithicus territory, again I say, Vinestrap sucks 😐 anyway, he doesn’t have much character development as he was only in one fight but he will be great comic relief.

And neither of my characters should be in a coma like Drain because though they were killed, they were killed in battle, not impaled suddenly by a stalactite so it wasn’t as much of a shock.

Ultimus + Journey

King Titan from Ultimus in miniature form (definitely want his appearance to be something like Ezma’s transformation in Emperor’s New Grove for him going from his normal size to mini size.) and Sig from Journey as my two villains. Also maybe the King Titan’s mini size shouldn’t be too small, maybe something like somewhere between Raptor size or so around 8-10 feet tall? He should also still keep extreme strength for his size too but nothing like his form in game or lore. Maybe like the strength of a Rex or at most Giga. And one other thing to add about Sig, her character likes to lure characters and play the trickster before she gets brutal. Similar to Loki, but again more brutal.

Sig, and she is a Reaper Queen. Like most of her species speak in her universe, she can only speak through telepathically implanting her thoughts into others thoughts, she can also read thoughts and understands normal speech as well. She’s a brutal character with a tendency of using her tail’s grabbing abilities to hold onto her victims as she brutally beats them into the ground or uses it to hold them as she uses her jaws to tear them apart. Her name might change when we finally get to her part in the story of Journey. But I think she would be a good choice.

HC

Lieutenant Felswand: Not the brightest bloke, not quite Evil Mastermind tier, but he’s still a minor villain!

The Dragon: A large dragon from the Fjordur Ark. Brought into The Aberration Ark by the boss Edmund Rockwell. Definitely a minor villain, due to its small amount of screen time.

Sir Edmund Rockwell: The main antagonist of Hope’s Cry. A 19th century chemist from London. (Read the lore, I’m not in the mood to explain his backstory) I ran out villains, so I had to use him. Much like the King Titan in PrimalApex’s story, Rockwell will be minimized! He will appear in a human form in TOT.

ok goodbye

GUYS chapter 21 of QOA is out now enjoy 😉

-sylveevee

Chapter 56 is out, only a few more chapters! Probably 3 and then chapter 70 will be the epilogue.

-Wyvernian still needs a name for book 3 🫠

From Ben

Lunar DFL we've already filled you in on it but we've talked faster than we ever have before so you might have to dig in for a few days.

Sunny Chapter 1 was amazing! Cedric sounds like a troublemaker just like James, I wonder why he's like this. For fun because hes bored? Or smth else? And PAUL is back! Once again he never fails to be cool. And the girl at the end is probably the baby in Prologue 1 right? Interesting how she has a foster father too who is probably up to some dubious plan. I wonder what her medallion power is and where the maid even got it from.

Also she has green eyes according to the Prologue.. im going to have to study that. Okay seeya around!

Sunnyfox, The Unforgettable Ride was a copy and paste of The Obelisk. It was never mentioned if they were doing it on purpose as a copy, paste or trying to make their own story and used The Obelisk as inspiration without putting any effort into trying to change it. Long story short, Moon got very upset with someone taking her story that she was working so hard on and making it into a bad version of her story. And after some time, the writer decided to discontinue the story.

-PrimalApex:)

From Ben

Also have we decided what the white obelisk is going to do in TOT?

Also, I am about to unashamedly advertise that PD in Haze dye is making a survival game called Exoplanet. And has asked for people’s ideas for creatures to put in this game. Need I say more, help PD out by giving some creature ideas if you haven’t!!

-an unashamed PrimalApex:)

MrGhost, chapter 25 of TOT was funny, that was definitely early HoP Ping, he’s so dumb 😂 so he woke up on Pandora and decided “you know what I’m gonna have a villain arc!” And then spent however many days finding random cardboard and making cutouts 🤣

That’s honestly such a HoP Ping thing to do, is the second book he’s less dumb but in HoP he was completely stupid. Also did you read the first few chapters or did you just guess all that stuff? Last thing, I think I’ll keep Ping in, just because him and Steve could be hilarious together and he’s technically the one who accidentally killed Drain, idk if that will make him want revenge or if he’ll be scared of Ping.. hmm

Oh the only criticisms I had was that Fort Olympia, was the Olympus tribes base, and they were like a mega tribe, the base it most of the island. And also Nova and Emerald know Ping they probably would’ve asked him more questions, but I can do that in my next chapter. I loved the part where he’s like “im a villain now!” And she just tosses him behind her 😂

-Wyvernian

Sylveevee, chapter 24 probably will come out in the next couple days. I’m sorry everyone for taking so long. Just trying to figure out what else I should do in the chapter besides just fixing the plane. Finally got something and writing it down currently.

Sunnyfox, AHH!!!! Prologue for your new book is already out!!!! I wasn’t expecting that!!! I read it and it was great!!! That maid/nurse is despicable!!! Putting a baby in any dumpster is atrocious!!! Oh of course the stealing the baby and lying about her dying is bad, but what monster puts a baby in a dumpster!!!lol. I really enjoyed it!! I can’t wait for chapter one!!!!

U.N.T!!!

-PrimalApex:)

Sunnyfox, Thank You for answering my questions!!! I’m glad you finished your series and glad to find out some of the behind the scenes stuff with what you wrote!!! Also if you don’t have any ideas yet. Maybe just continue the universe. Just further into the future and not the Shadow Phoenix Kingdom as the main focus. You created many more possibilities with how you wrote it and can continue the story for a while longer. I mean we delve into one kingdom mainly and a second kingdom just barely in your series. The possibilities with the other kingdoms are pretty vast, with this universe’s story just beginning, literally with only the fifth generation of Riddles coming to be!! Rivalries can form, new wars, or possible outside forces or new kingdoms with what Tom did giving others the powers of the medallions in implants. Your universe can continue on if you feel it’s the best idea. But it’s up to you if you think you want to continue or do something else!!

Bob The Survivor, yeah!!! Moon made it earlier this month and we’ve been trying to get use to it with adding our own pages and discussing random things and story related stuff on there. It’s kinda nice to get some of the discussions that literally just overwhelmed Achatina and drowned out a lot of people. Also I read your last two chapters!!! They were very good!!! I can’t wait for your next story in June!!!!

Sylveevee, I’ve been waiting a bit to read your stories because I was and still am reading several different stories and trying to make sure I don’t overwhelm myself with all the information and getting it all jumbled up or forget some important information. But since TROTP ended, I’m gonna get started on reading your stories now!!! Both QOA and TPL!!

Until Next Time!!!

-PrimalApex:)

From Ben

Hi guys just wanted to announce that the rewrites of Chapter 10 and 15 of TAOH released like 24 hours ago.

Chapter 20.5 is next because I felt like it was really rushed and I want to include more in it, so watch out for that one when it comes out.

Greetings Bob, I’m doing good today!! We’ve never met before however. My name is PrimalApex (not the original Apex, I didn’t know there was another Apex until a few months ago) but you can call me Apex or Primal if you prefer, whichever one you feel comfortable using. I have been a reader of the Achatina Community for over a year now and have been a writer for a few months.

I do have to say that it isn’t your responsibility to apologize for the entire discord for their actions and you are only responsible for your actions on there. As it is every members responsibility for their actions on there, if they feel like they need to apologize for their actions then they can. If they don’t, they shouldn’t. It isn’t right to forcefully make someone apologize if they don’t feel like they should. And yes, I do want to strive for peace in the dex community!! And I hope we can!!! I do think the peace negotiations should happen here on the dex and not a different platform as this is neutral ground for everyone is a writer on here and it should be for all writers to see. I also hope you can stay around for a while and see some of what we’ve been writing!!!

-PrimalApex:)

I posted the next chapter of TWOTP. Things will soon began to make sense…

-SunnyFox57

Dear anonymous writer, I would agree with you that they cherry picked a single message if it wasn’t a full conversation on the disc. between DTG and another writer about how the writers on the dex either write like ten year olds and write worse than in back in 2020 in DTG’s eyes or in the other writer’s pov don’t even write and spout rubbish. Now there IS blatant context for that conversation and it can’t be taken in any other way. Saying that we write horribly or that we write nonsense. This offends me not for my own sake because I really don’t care what people say about my stories, but for the other writers who I have had the pleasure of reading their stories and have had the pleasure of writing alongside with. Because they are good, no great writers. And they don’t deserve being talked behind their backs. If DTG and this other writer really felt like this. Just tell us, in a way that is kind. Give us pointers on what we should fix in our writing skills, encourage those who are actually writing good stories or are having a difficult time. And give us valid reasons why they think what they said. But they didn’t, they went to discord and hid their thoughts about us. I also think it’s shameful that they use 10 year olds as an example. Now I don’t know if theirs any 10 year old writers here, but I hope they aren’t discouraged from this. I feel that we have a responsibility to help encourage young writers and help them grow in their writing and not discourage them from writing altogether. And I’m sorry, I don’t want to argue nor fight. But I feel there is something here that needs to be shown in the light. Now I’m not saying everyone there is like this and thinks like this. But I also have a question for you, what community looks like a healthier option to you? A community that uses profanity and talks M rated content and never seems to write here anymore with their Ark stories; or a community that encourages others to write, stands up for those who are taking fire from others, doesn’t use profanity or talk M rated content by choice and continues writing there Ark stories. Please give me an answer on this topic. Because I’d really like to know what you think about this. As for me, I can say I think this is the healthier option. Again, I don’t want to fight or argue so please don’t take this personally against you. I don’t know what you speak on there or how you act and you seem genuinely kind. But to those who bad mouthed writers on here is something I felt was wrong and I’m glad someone revealed it.

Until Next Time,

-PrimalApex:)

Mystery person who is blaming FanFictioners for nothing,

Maybe the person who ‘attacked your discord’ didn’t make you look bad. Maybe you look bad bc you joined a rude dc server! Maybe you should stop making friends with people like DTG… None of us want to fight. If you had just stopped talking behind our backs, this never would have happened. Again none of us want to fight. This is a peaceful community if you don’t like it, you can go back to DTG’s rude dc. Thank you for your time and patience.

Yours Truly,

MrGhostGamer

from Ben

Im glad you all liked Chapter 21 😁

Sunny maybe a good idea would be to investigate Mayors' Manor or Terran High for clues, or maybe even ask residents how they got there and if they can go home. Idk. Anyway, later!

Ok yes just checked, Salizar indeed calls him Apex in the chapter in carbonomys. Also THE CHAPTER HAS 12 UPZ?! I didn’t know that many people read it that far!

-Wyvernian

“Nash led the amarg’s into the swamp… and they never left.” Sounds like something out of a horror film. Chapter 52 of PoP was great Wyvernian!!! The Amarga’s being a psychopathic cult was amazing!! And Nash’s plan really worked well!!! I really enjoyed it and I can’t wait for the next one!!!!

-PrimalApex:)