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What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
Yes! I am doing great Primal-(somewhat.)!
I have mainly been working on my writing so.. QOA might get remade..
I can try to get back on TOT(still giggling on how it looks like a crying face- pft-)
I also found a trick on IBIS— so I CAN get on the web now! Happy about that I just have to log into my accountttt—
Anyways! Glad to be back- as of writing this im in a car getting spammed by a gc!
-sylveevee
Ranger, no yeah I totally get that man. I’m dealing with writer’s block so I get it. Hope you write soon!!!!
SpecialRaptor, do you prefer Zznake0 or SpecialRaptor? I guess Zznake0 since that’s what you go by. I’ll try to make sure I use that from now on!!! And no problem!!!! I hope Grammarly works out for you!!! And that’s awesome!!! I hope you enjoy them!!! Everyone here has awesome stories!!!
Hi Snek!!!! Yep!!! Achatina is where we all hang and lurk, and you’ve already seen the fandom!!! And that’s basically it, a few of us have our own private spots like Zznake0 uses Troodon and Raptor, and people like PD still hold up in the dyes when they pop in and out. But most of us are here or in the fandom. And I get the feeling, even for my time here it’s been a crazy ride!!!! Anyway, awesome to meet you!!! I hope you enjoy your time here!!! I’d totally recommend like ten different stories, but I feel I overwhelm when I do that! lol!!!
Anyway,
Until Next Time!!!!!
-PrimalApex:)
To: Wolfsbane / Compy
Greetings. We’ve taken your message into account and have went forward and removed all of your stories from the story sections. They are “irrelevant” after all.
You’re smart enough to write a story but you aren’t smart enough to understand that community isn’t possible without communication? You even asked people to come to a Trophy Tips section just to tune into your story’s sneak peek (which is NOT story-related, as it is NOT the stories section). You take the alphabetical creature publication format from others here and you think you have the audacity or authority to tell people what to do?
You’re not here for anyone else but yourself it seems. You don’t serve a purpose here if so.
Don’t come back.
Geez, sorry for the inactivity. I’ve been meaning to write for the past two weeks, but it’s been chaotic.
SpecialRaptor, I’m so glad you have decided to come back to writing!!!! I have always loved your stories you’ve written!!!! I can understand not being able to write much though. It kinda feels like that for me too. Also, I think you can post your illustrations on the wiki discussion page. Sunny, Moon, and the others post there illustrations there. If there Ark related or even if their not. You need an account though. But a lot of people use the discussion page there to talk on every topic you can think of. We talk there so we don’t put a load of off topic stuff in the Dex.
I— don’t know what EDDSWORLD is. But I am a fan of Murder Drones and a bit of a fan to the Amazing Digital Circus (which had a FANTASTIC ENDING!!!). Moon I know loves both terribly.
While I don’t celebrate Pride month, I do celebrate Jurassic Park month. So I do hope a Happy Jurassic Park Month to everyone here!!!!
I will read ADVENTURES OF TROOP TROODON as soon as I am done posting this!!! And, again if you do want to share your illustrations. You can share them on the wiki discussion board. Like I said, Moon, Sunny, Ben and even I (plus loads more of the Achatina crew) share canon and noncanon illustrations of our characters on there.
Did I miss anything there? If so, please ask me again. Again, I have been “lurking” like PastelGothPower does. Which is horrible as I shouldn’t be.
Oh, right, I’m doing good!!! Been busy with work annd chores and life. Also trying to beat Writer’s Block right now. Doing some artwork of characters I have written about right now. How are you doing?
SYLVEEVEE!!!!! YOUR ALIVE!!!!! WE MISS YOU!!!! HOPE YOU CAN COME BACK SOON!!!!!! If you can answer now, How are you doing? Hope you can join back up for TOT, we’re trying to start up again soon!!!
Ranger, read the new Prologue of Tribe of Shadows, it was really good!!!! I’m glad you’re reposting and rebooting, I have been needing to read it but could never find it. So this will really help me read it!!! And I get the idea of rebooting. I might be doing the same with one of my stories. But idk yet.
I love the lore bites you do!!!!! You do awesome worldbuilding and I can’t wait to see that worldbuilding come to life!!!!!
I feel like I am missing something, if I am. I am so so sorry!!!! Please let me know!!!!
Anyway,
Until Next Time!!!!
-PrimalApex:)
so sorry I couldn’t find your replies. They are always all the way down at the bottom and it takes me a while to get to them. :V
Hii PrimalApex!! How are you doing? Is anything new happening with the wiki and stuff? Also I just realized I do indeed have access to the wiki, but no discord (insert cool emoji heh)
How are you doing moon? I never thought of your full user being moonflight! That is so cool!! It sounds like starflight from the WoF series!!
And welcome to Achatina to all of you new comers!! I hope you all have a good visit here :)
-as always,
Zznake0(SpecialR)
SpecialRaptor, there are a lot of words I use or try to use instead of using said (I never used replies, but I have used replied on several occasions). Plenty, and it mostly depends on what emotion I want to express, how the character behaves, or even what the character is. Like for instance, I use growled, snarled, hissed, squawked, roared, screeched and so on for creature characters along with other normal means I use.
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*brings in a character for reference*
“Like Nightfall, the Troodon from Journey.” I say. Nightfall screeches in Argentavis as he stamps his claws.
“Come on Apex!!! I was just about to eat some nice Morellotops BBQ!!!” Nightfall hissed. I roll my eyes at the overdramatic creature.
“Look, I’m just bringing you here as an example to show someone how I write my stories like what words to add after a character speaks. And how I write characters and to explain that it’s really up to the person to decide how they want to write.”
“Oh… well, sorry for snapping.” Nightfall said. There was an awkward silence between me and Nightfall as we sat in the white void.
“Well, have you told this person yet that you can also just not add any extra word dialogue if two characters are involved a longer a deeper discussion between two characters?” Nightfall suggested. I shook my head.
“No, I was going to get to that though.”
“Well, you might tell this person that you should always make sure that you mention the person who speaks in the unclaimed dialogue prior to the dialogue occurring.” Nightfall added. I nodded my head as he said this.
“Yes, I’ll make sure I say that.” There was another moment of silence as both sat there.
“So, when is the next Journey chapter coming out.” Nightfall asked.
“I dunno yet. Maybe in a couple weeks.” I answered. Nightfall looked at me like I killed someone.
“A COUPLE WEEKS!!” Nightfall growled. “It’s already been a few months!!” He screeched. I rolled my eyes and sighed.
“I’ve got writer’s block, okay? I gotta break through it before I can write anything.” I said. He looked at me with a disappointed look.
“But everyone’s waiting on what happens next, AND THE READERS WANT TO SEE MORE OF ME!!!” Nightfall squawked. I glared at him. Nightfall just grinned back.
“Why don’t you ever write me like this in Journey?”
“Alright, time for you to go.” I said. Nightfall’s eyes widened.
“Now hold on. Wait just a second! I—”
“Nope, no more seconds…” I interject as I send Nightfall back to where he belongs.
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Anyway, that’s kind of how I write a creature in my creature based story. But I also use a bunch more. And plenty more for human POV stories too. I use words like shouted, screamed, cackled, chuckled, groaned, moaned, yelled, whispered, whimpered, cried, lashed out, retorted and a lot more. I also use adjectives added onto said like “said arrogantly” and so on. Or you can always add an action with it. Like “he said continuing to look for the diamond ring” and “she said gritting her teeth.”.
For sprucing up your story, maybe just describing more around the characters. Or even describe the characters a bit. If we’re reading from Troop’s POV. Describe Ziggy and how he looks or visa versa. Or small features of each of them.
Or when describing time differences, you don don’t have to add parentheses. Like instead of (The scene is no longer daytime, welcoming the night), write—
As Ziggy searches the Redwood forest, time passes quicker than it seemed to be. With minutes becoming hours. Without even realizing it, Ziggy found himself in dark but comforting arms of the night.
It says the same thing, but it goes more into describing. And you can take it further too. But again, most of this is my opinion. Writing is an art style and everyone has their own unique perspective and way to write. And I’m probably not the best writer to give advice. Ben is a great writer who can probably give a lot more tips if you need them.
Honestly, your story isn’t bad plot wise do far, or even poorly written. The word “said” is one of those words that is kinda vital of having a lot of in a story. But it sounds repetitive. I’ve already seen you use a lot of alternative words for said though in chapter one. So the most I can say is just try to avoid using the word “then” outside of dialogue itself. Always make sure the story can be read easily and understood by the reader, take a few steps in their shoes as you write. And just try to make your chapters bigger if you can. You don’t have to, most of the time writing will gradually get longer as you get more and more acclimated to writing. And if you read other people’s stories or even author’s books. That can help you understand what you should do in situations you’re having trouble with.
But, so far, you’re doing just fine SpecialRaptor!!! Also, I’d suggest using Grammarly if you are worried about Grammar and punctuation. I use it to go over my drafts and I read along and even change by adding or removing scenes from my chapters as I correct any grammatical mistakes.
Anyway, I think that’s it for now.
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
Journey Through All Creatures
Chapter 1: Swamp Snail
This is the official remake of Journey Through All Creatures’ first chapter.
Original Post Date: Oct. 5, 2024
Note, story starts in Achatina, The Island ABC order for Section I and has a Prologue. Prologue is in the same section as this. Next chapter in Allosaurus.
It was late into the afternoon. The sun had begun drifting to the west horizon. Just north of the swamp was a small, 2 by 2 thatch hut with a bed and storage box inside. All that lay outside was a campfire. It was far from the deep and thick jungle, close to the ocean shore. Then the door swung open. A survivor walked out of it, holding a bola and a club. The survivor walked south towards the swamp, looking around the area.
“Okay.. first creature on my list should be around here somewhere…” The survivor said. He continued walking until he reached the swamp waters, the thick and low-hanging trees, and multiple snakes and dilos. Then there it was: The Achatina. The first of many creatures that Sodden would need to kill on his journey. Sodden then crept up behind a snail slowly sliding towards the water. He threw a bola at it and then beat it repeatedly with his club. Then he heard quiet hissing behind him and turned around quickly. He shouted as he saw a snake going towards him. He then slammed his club into the snake’s head and shot it down with a bow. Then he turned back to the snail, who was hiding in the shell. He beat it over and over until the snail fell unconscious, then he shot it down with the bow. Sodden nodded and turned back around to return to his base.
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I hope you enjoyed this remake. It’d be good to give this more points than the original, just so it’s easier to find it, especially considering how much Achatina is used. Anyway, that’s all.
-RelatingHen8906
lol!! No Pastel, I wasn’t trying to call you out. But you were the one who coined the term of “Lurking” here, so it’s just the term we use when we just read posts and don’t write anything back. lol!! Also, I love that for any medium of time passing in here. Pastel lurking within the shadows is always going to be a constant.
Also, to whoever wrote that post saying you don’t need an email to make a fandom account. You’re wrong. You do in fact need an email. Totally wasn’t me btw, totally not me misremembering… totally not…
Anyway, SpecialRaptor, I hope you can!!! We have a blast in there and it’s always nice to get another person to join the chaos!!!
Also, I read your two chapters!!!! It’s great so far!!!!! I love Ziggy and Troop!!! They’re so fun!!! And I can’t wait to see what adventures Troop and Ziggy go on!!!!
Sylveevee, that’s awesome!!! Can’t wait to read the remake of QOA!!!!
Anyway, Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
Forget the illustration stuff, I don’t think I have any way to post my drawings online on ibisPaint X due to restrictions. Sorry!
-specialraptor(zznake0)
If you have any questions, opinions, or suggestions for my newest story, feel free to ask me in raptor or troodon section! Tyvm.