Stories Tips
What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
From Ben
Hey OMEGA09, nice seeing you again! I saw your story The Falling Tides in Cosmo and in Yuty. Anyway I just wanted to drop by to give you tips as you asked at the end of your chapter.
Okay so so far there isn’t much to say since it’s just the first chapter but I still have a little bit to give. You can try making your chapters a bit longer, maybe like double the length of Chapter 1 would be a good start. Also you don’t need to put parts for shorter chapters, it’s only if it’s super long. So that’s it for formatting, but since the story has just started I’m not too sure where you’re at for story elements. For now just focus on giving the main character Dylan some background like what he used to be before the ARKs (which you already did he was a gamer) and some other things like his morals (who is he willing to harm for his own survival?) and also his personality traits. Is he nice, or maybe mean? You can work on that for Dylan, and also for any other characters you plan on introducing in The Falling Tides. Well that’s about it, I’ll be waiting for the next chapter!
From Ben
Hello everyone, Chapter 97b of TAOH is out in Pachy. There are three chapters left. I cannot believe we have made it this far. There are a few new writers who have joined this little community, which I’m grateful of, so if you don’t know where my story is, TAOH (The Arks: Over Heaven) is located in the Aerial filter backwards alphabetically and starts in Wyvern. Both the Prologue and Chapter 1 are in Wyvern.
Also Moon Tales Girl, you entering TOT is currently being considered by the Crossover Council. We’ll need to make sure that you meet all the guidelines and stuff. Also it’d probably be vital for you to read the books that the characters come from so that if you do join or eventually join then you’ll be all caught up. Thx.
-SunnyFox57
Okay, so I miss one author’s story that I should have probably mentioned by name, plus a collaboration that should also get attention.
Ranger: Writer of Tribe of the Shadows (Deinonychus exclusive) and War in the Mountains (Fasolosuchus exclusive). He has been deserving for this recognition and should have readers to enjoy these stories!!
Fire and Fangs: A collaboration between Sunnyfox and Nuzgul. An awesome story!! I highly recommend it!!
-PrimalApex:)
From Ben
Welcome OMEGA09! I’m guessing your name is derived from JWTG? Very cool. I’m glad you enjoy The Arks: Over Heaven! Guess that’s another fan of TAOH. Anyway I hope you stick around long. It’s really nice here. If you have any questions feel free to ask me or anyone else here whether it be about stories or whatever else. By the way, you can view story tips / messages faster using the D0d0dex Stories website. Search it up on a web browser, click on the link, filter by newest, and refresh to see the most recent tips very quickly compared to the app. You’ll still have to send messages by the app. By the way, the Tree Moose mod will be on Ascended according to the creator (GitezGood).
Hello Ember to Achatina section! I remember your story: My Life as an ARK Noob, right? Anyway glad you’ve decided to come around hopefully stick around too. If you continue your story again I’ll be around to read it. Uhhh what else? Oh yeah, you can view story tips / messages faster using the D0d0dex Stories website. Search it up on a web browser, click on the link, filter by newest, and refresh to see the most recent tips very quickly compared to the app. You’ll still have to send messages by the app.
GitezGood, I just read Chapter 8 Part 2 of TFoF. You did pretty good with the backstories of Scarlet and you implied that she has some sort of tormentors. The dialogue between the wyverns during their meal was also a nice touch to the story. These little moments make the characters stand out and shine brighter. Scarlet’s outrage toward Amber was also really well done. To me, I’m not sure I like Amber. You did good, you can keep practicing this sort of method to writing out characters, mostly with Febreeze, Coal, and the other wyverns but i’m sure you’ve got it down in the next few chapters. Here is a bit more advice if you’re willing to read:
Little actions: If you want to express characters’ emotions you can have them do certain actions to signify in a subtle way, without necessarily having to use dialogue. Having the build up just makes it more suspenseful. Like when Coal is saying how he likes the food, you can have him chewing on it while saying it, and maybe he likes it so much that meat juice is dribbling down his wyvern chin. It gives the story even more spark and especially the characters. Or if a character is nervous, their eyes can squint and they can sweat or something.
Pacing: The pacing is just how fast the story is being moved along. Usually you want the pacing to be fast during a fight scene but slow during dialogue. You can try to slow it down during dialogue moments, if you know what I mean. That way, the readers can absorb the dialogue and information provided better.
I suppose that’s it. You’ve improved great lengths so far since Chapter 8 Part 1 already! (Also wow 6 parts for Chapter 9 that’s a lot).
Sunny, I read Chapter 21 of TLW and it was amazing! Rowan’s nightmare just gave me the lead I needed with the Prophecy at the beginning of the story! So it seems to me that the five people the prophecy were talking about were Rowan, Cedric, Oliver, Elayne, and Kannon. Interesting indeed. I also believe by the look of it, Rowan is going to split off from the group and survive on her own (as she should… besides Oliver she’s the only one doing much work). Cedric and Rowan’s argument about whether or not William to go was also really cool. I love Cedric’s opinion. Even though he doesn’t respect William by the looks of it, he still cares about him. Still though splitting up is not a good idea. William should come, but he doesn’t necessarily need to participate in the fighting if there is any. Liv can watch over him while the five take care of it (also Liv should NOT be fighting she is like eight years old). Also wow so William heard some of the Master’s goons walking above too, which is weird because if they have control over the ARK wouldn’t they be able to just collect him? Maybe they aren’t as powerful as they seem. Anyway I can’t wait to see how TLW goes. Also still curious about Sunny fox and her role in this.
PrimalApex, Chapter 50 of TOT was phenomenal! Wow we’ve made it that far. Anyway, Andrew’s transformation to the Herald of Light was awesome and definitely what I was expecting for Drain’s opposite! I’m not too sure what else to say. Oh yeah, I’m also wondering what Star was doing with the terminal. I dont’ know if that’s up for me to decide. Probably is but please confirm anyway. Anyway it was an amazing chapter I also like the characters included. Well this means MrGhostGamer is up. I’m guessing he’ll do another Rockwell POV or something. Yeah that’s about it see ya’ll later.
Ya Gitez, we do have some unique names around here, and then there’s Ben LOL 🤣
Hmm, idk how you could share the tree moose art.. i don’t think links work on D0dodex, id say you could use Fandom but you previously said you can’t, which is too bad.. hmm we’ll have to think on this. And good luck with your game!
-Wyvernian
Wait a second. Ben and slyveevee have stop TOT? Ok I guess. Not really much to say. Except that in the Lower South Cave I’ve think I’m about to die. Well we’ll see. I wonder if I can join TOT possibly.
Break-it The Final Witness
PS: Anything on the fandom I can’t see because I’m not allowed too.
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