Stories Tips
What are some stories about the electrophorus? Memorable electrophorus stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
The reader, you have improved quite a bit, very nice job. I honestly forgot I told you so I forgot to check for a while but anyway there may be someone impersonating me or any other writers so if they say something out of character, it most likely isn't them. I just wanted to let you know as they have impersonated me and Moon and will probably impersonate someone else next. You did very good on your story though. I too, find it hard to put length in a chapter. A good way to add length is detail like instead of saying "a hanging pot" say "a clay pot with symbols covering it, hung from the roof by a single chain."
From Ben
Hi Reader, I finished the first 30 Chapters of A World of Dinosaurs, and I liked it quite a bit. Snows a fun character to watch hunt and do stuff, although the pacing felt a little weird in the beginning because all they did was hunt rabbits, it got better near the end of the 30 chapters when more dinosaurs were introduced. Although one problem I do have is dialogue, I think quotation marks should be used if they havent already, itll make it easier to tell whos saying who.
Thats all the feedback, and im wondering who that black dog is. Fenrir? And of course what map this takes place on, and what Rose has to do with the enemy wolf pack. I also wonder why Snow gets weird dream visions, is it like a special power?
Well, Ill be around in Achatina with SunnyFox and friends. Come by soon! And if you have any response, feel free to put it anywhere. I always find those messages.
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