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ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion
Stories Tips
What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
The Red Pike
Red’s story, chapter 3
Red made it to far away from herbivore island. Either she had almost defeated them, weakened them by a small amount, or did nothing. She had lost one of her tentacles, and had “harpoons” on her. A dolphin swam up to Red.
“You look like that one mosa!” Exclaimed the dolphin.
“The last mosa? What do you mean?” Asked Red
“He had a lot of metal things on him, he almost died!” Said the dolphin. Red grabbed the dolphin, and then stabbing it with another tentacle, killing it. She ate the dolphin, then thought to herself. “The last mosa... I’ll find it and kill it.” Red thought to herself.
I’m going to try to make a story I hope you like it
The Prophecy chapter 1
He woke in a dark room only lit by a large diamond in the center of the room. The diamond turned and said “your the first to wake. I hope you enjoyed your nap.” The man realized that he was trapped in a glass cylinder. It turned then said “ I am the leader and I have brought you here to test you to see if you have what it takes to be an survivor, only the strongest will survive.” Then it all went dark.
I hoped you enjoyed the first chapter the next chapters will be alphabetical order. - Shadow Dragon
To Ben
Thanks for your feedback! Yeah there are references to the events in the Aberration segment. Cool. And also the fact that Dread is the leader of the tribe after Rod left Aberration and we will see him soon. More info is yet to come for Extinction.
Also I reposted Chapter 30 to fix the error of the day count being 75 instead of 61. It will make more sense now.
-RelatingHen8906
To: RelatingHen
From: Ben
RelatingHen, Chapter 29 of JTAC was pretty good! I enjoyed the Morellatops taming process, and now my suspicions of Rod are raising because of what he said. Who is Dread, and what shield is he talking about? It seems he’s only coming along the journey out of revenge against the Rock Death Tribe, which I think was the original tribe who had betrayed him on Aberration and caused the Ravage. Clearly though Rod’s plans conflict with Sodden’s, so he’s going to have to deal with him one way or another. Suspicious indeed. I also liked the flashbacks to ARKtic / Snowball, and I’m curious about who the survivor Nal and Dorack saved is, and if we’ll see them in the future. I still think it’s a bit contradictory to have the two enjoy their time on Snowball for it being a ‘great challenge’ if they almost died doing it, it would make more sense if they’re just thrillseekers. You’d have to show it in their dialogue and actions in future chapters if so. Also it was interesting to see some information about C Tribe’s reaction to the others’ ascension on the Island, and just getting a POV on The Island in general. It seems there’s a ‘barrier’ of sorts between Extinction and probably the rest of the ARKs. If they can head to Extinction earlier, it’s probably because the C Tribe has an Explorer with them. It was awesome seeing Cordor’s wrath get the best of him, and the sticky situations he keeps getting in is only because of his impulse and irrationality. Seeing how C Tribe is strengthening the barrier, though, makes me believe that there will be some giant war between C Tribe and Sodden’s group in the Extinction Section of the story. I’m interested to see what Cordor wants with it though.
Chapter 30 of JTAC was also cool, the Alpha Raptor taming process was nice and the flashbacks to Nal’s near-death was also really cool. There’s not too much to say about this chapter, but the only thing that seems off-putting is the information Dorack gives in Chapter 29 seems contridcatory to what happens in Chapter 30. Dorack says that his best friend (Nal) was mere centiseconds away from death, and her HP was in the hundredths, on Day 60. However the convo between Dorack and Nal about the situation happens on Day 74, which is before Day 75 when Nal wakes up. The timeline seems a little off, I would suggest going over it and revising it to avoid confusion. Overall, my favorite part of this chapter was Dorack sacrificing his blood to save Nal using the blood syringe, it was a creative way to get it done.
To: MrGhostGamer
From: Ben
Chapters 3 and 4 of AOEE were great! I’m even more curious now as to why the United Republic is throwing their own citizens and people into the ARK. I already like Josh, he seems to be an eccentric fellow who will help Percival and Ethan survive and acclimate to their new environment, especially since he’s already got a basic base running. Now I’m even more curious as to who could be arguing outside their base.
To: RelatingHen
From: Ben, & KM
Relating, the new Chapter 28 was great! I enjoyed the various flashbacks to Nal and Dorack’s time in Snowball. I like how deflective Dorack is with the growing trauma of the ARKtic, and just like most people, isn’t going to be vulnerable so easily. I liked the lore drops of the Explorers, which adds a bit more of a twist and is a fine explanation as to how they are able to travel non-linearly. The only question still is who transported Dorack and Nal to Snowball then, so that could be explored later on. I also like the usage of the Apex creatures from that one mod. The twist that Rod was an Explorer all along is cool, but if he’s an Explorer and can ascend non-linearly, then couldn’t he just transport them all to the Dead Earth so they could destroy the Assassin Heart immediately? And if he can’t transport them to the Dead Earth, why not to Aberration / Fjordur where they could ascend then to the Dead Earth? There should be a definitive reason as to why besides just having to kill all the creatures alphabetically. I also didn’t think it made too much sense that Dorack said it was “great times at ARKtic” if it was such a traumatic experience for him and Nal. More of a continuity error. Final thing is… you really need a name generator or something. I wouldn’t advise having multiple characters with the same name in a story. Alternate universes / different stories is OK, but things just get confusing when you’ve got multiple of the same name or similar name (Rod, Red, Rud, etc). That’s all, I’ll be around for 29.
Hey Break-It, yeah. We were just talking about the creature vote for Ark on SurviveTheArk.com. The Cheetah and Xenoceratops were creatures in the vote. And we did submit two of our own. We are planning to submit more and reusing one for the next submission!!! I don’t know if Wyvernian wants me to say the ideas here yet though as we don’t want someone who isn’t apart of this community to stumble across this message and steal our ideas. But I will say our Maip is coming back for Genesis One and Fjordur. Though it might be less successful now with the addition of Megaraptor, our design is unique enough that it can be seen as very different from the Megaraptor.
But yeah, that’s kinda just the gist of what that was about Break-It.
Until Next Time!!!
-PrimalApex:)
To: TarrWasTaken, Jerrald Jerrald (is it one Jerrald or two?), Break-it, RelatingHen
From: Ben, & KM (get this girl outta here)
TarrWasTaken, once your story comes out, we’ll definitely read it!
Jerrald, I’m enjoying your The Island story so far! I’ve always wanted to read a fanfic more based off real ASE experiences but at the same time taking a more ‘novelized’ approach, if you know what I mean. Fair warning, once you get past the first few chapters, the middle section becomes the most difficult to write. If you have a good idea for what your ending will be, then the ending will breeze by, and of course the main ideas pop up in the beginning, but it’s always the middle people have most trouble with. So, good luck with that. Anyway, like other people pointed out, you can try splitting up your paragraphs to make it easier to go through, and a few other grammatically conventional stuff, but you’re doing good with your story so far. Good vocabulary and everything’s just good. I’ll read Chapter IV when it comes out.
Break-it, not too much. DiploLover had to leave, which you know, and PD has also returned (which you also know). PrimalApex is also discussing the Creature Votes that are happening for Valguero right now. We tried submitting our own ideas (Maip and Centrosaurus) but that didn’t exactly work out, since we didn’t get as many votes as the Top 10. The winner of the vote was Megaraptor. I don’t know all the details, but you could probably find a YT video talking about it. Anyway, I’ll be around for your next SOR chapter!
Relating, I enjoyed the new and updated Chapter 27! I enjoyed the more in depth character background between Nal and Dorack, and this hinted Arctic ARK. I think it would have been better the mystery was built up over time throughout the Scorched Earth Arc, especially in an environment they haven’t fully mastered yet. Also, for ‘memories’, for stuff like that, especially if someone is recalling near-death, it’d be much more emotionally overwhelming. They don’t come and go like prophetic visions, so if Dorack has another memory outburst, build up would make it even better. And in this particular case, flashbacks can serve more purpose than just explaining what happened.
AnywayIt was a better idea anyway to go over some of the minor characters’ backgrounds since some haven’t exactly been touched upon yet, and don’t have too much personality to show, so exploring Nal and Dorack’s backstory was a good idea, compared to adding even more characters. Why they ascended off the Island and ended up on the Arctic Ark would be a good idea too, since I assume the ascension process is linear. This could be a plot hole if it isn’t explained in a future chapter. Also, since it was explored in a previous chapter, explaining how people know about the ‘Multiverse’ would be a good idea, besides just being a cheap way to reference other stories, Anyway, I enjoyed it, and I’ll be around for Chapter 28.
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Hello again everyone… um what’s going on? I see PD is back(Hi by the way) and Diplolover is gone(Bye. I never knew you but I’ll miss you). I notice a couple more people that I’ve never seen before. And also Xeno or Cheetah? I can’t get into the votes… heck I don’t even know where they are. Oh and SoR I’ll be back for that soon. Currently bouncing ideas round. Anyway just wondering what’s up.
Break-it The Final Witness
Re-ascends!!!
Hi! I’m really like - unorganised rn. So if I take alootaa time to reply im just dying metaphorically. Hi Primal! Hi Sunny! I’m so happy y’all r still here <33, you guys are Awesome. And hello everyone new!
-PD
(ps…. new things may come on haze, or a new story may emerge on achatina…. :3 )
*Emerges briefly from the void*
Hey, PD!!!! It’s great to see you back!! <33 How have you been??
I’m doing okay. Still on break though. A lot has been happening irl, to be honest.
And to the newcomers, welcome to Achatina! I hope you all enjoy your time here.
Just to clarify for anyone who might be wondering if I’m back because I posted one tip or whatever, uh a month ago, maybe(? Help I can’t remember 😭): I’m still on hiatus and probably will be for a little while longer to focus on my mental health. I was posting that chapter then because I couldn’t get it up earlier due to some of the word restrictions on the DDEX app so uh yeah. ^
Anyways…it’s nice to see yall again. Cya later!
-SunnyFox57