Stories Tips
What are some stories about the achatina? Memorable achatina stories, wild encounters, and fan fiction.
From Ben
Wyvernian, Chapter 7 of TOP was really good! So Count Ghost was the old Count before Count Phasma, but Count Ghost refused his offer, which is why Salizar turned to someone else: Count Phasma, probably because he was the runt and albino, making him more of an outcast and thus powerless in this horde. It’d make sense he’d be willing to take the risk. Also Ryker’s group’s plan involved taking the trophies of all the guardians so that they can ascend. I almost forgot they would need those. I wonder how they’ll succeed in their plan if Apex is a thing. Maybe Apex is a completely different dragon that Salizar created and not the boss version, Apex is the alpha dragon or smth like that. Also the line that states they had “procured the artifacts needed to fight the dragon, as they had already done it dozens of times before,” suggests that they had been through this process a LOT OF TIMES and not just three times as it may have been suggested. They have been ascending off the ARKs trying to find a way to the Earth for a long time. Hmm, hold on. What if they got to Earth through Aberration? That’s why there are two “Aberrations”, because it’s possible that Aberration 01 is the one with Rockwell while Aberration 02 is the one without. Ryker’s group may have made it to Aberration 02 and gotten to Earth safely without having to encounter him. Anyway that was a good chapter. Sad to see Salizar fall so far he won’t even call Phasma a friend.
It’s a very tough and silly platform lolz, but yeah everything Apex said is good advice! Remember there’s always Fandom too Galaxia! If you ever do think about joining that. (Dododex Fan-fiction Wiki is its name, you’ll get it if you search it up.)
Everyone, I am halfway through Clans’ next chapter and am making progress with See and Pandora too, though don’t expect See’s soon lol unless I have some sort of writing breakthrough—
FORGOR TO SAY BUT Apex, the TOT chapter was amazing! Tago saving Andrew was so cool, I loved that. Super excited for MGG’s chapter when he and Sunny get back. That’s it for now!
—Moon
From Ben
Sylveevee I really liked Chapter 32 of QOA! Draconian is a cool character and the dragon wings are a cool power even though it isn’t as strong as the other siblings. I feel like the name is a bit too similar to Draco and might get confusing but i don’t think it matters since Draco got thrown into the dungeon. AND YES WE FINALLY GOT PAUL IN QOA. Now all we need is a Paul somewhere in Fjordur and Pandora Chronicles and that will make the Paul takeover complete… Wolf Syl (that’s what I’m calling her) finding the gem for Paul’s necklace was really neat. I can’t wait to see what Paul’s power is. Anyway that was a fun chapter. Although it’s about time I throw some advice out the window for you:
Try to focus the attention on character interactions and dialogue, and try to make the conversation impactful instead of it being sort of a driver for the plot. Dialogue can be used to express the emotions of the characters. Try to imagine how it is by taking conversations from the real world and placing it in the story. If that makes any sense. Creating memorable moments with dialogue will make the characters even more likable and fun to read about, making it more satisfying to kill them off once you do.
Aberration is not very aberrationy at the moment, maybe you can add some scenes of exploring the map with characters. It would be a great opportunity to introduce new characters or build upon old ones that need more screen time.
I forgot what else i was going to say
Yeah but that’s about it! Good luck and TAKE A BREAK IF YOU WANT TO TAKE ONE
From Ben
Sandmaster, Chapter 24 of Overseer was really great! (I think you mislabeled the chapter btw). Choc the Megatherium nurse seems like such a nice character and I can’t wait to see more of her within Overseer! Gig the Rock Elemental is also pretty cool and I’m guessing he’s probably going to be a mentor-like figure to Fuzzball to help him harness the power of the Whiteout, like Yoda. Makes sense since he’s basically made from magic I suppose. Fuzzball’s dream worries me though, who’s gonna die?! It happens in the snow though. I’m guessing this event will happen much later down the road.
Chapter 2 of Great War of the Biomes was also really good. And oooh so that’s how Eclipse learned about the Tails and joined them, it was through Night. I’m getting a bad feeling about it though because we don’t see Night at all in Overseer. I would worry about Eclipse but we see him in Overseer so… although I wonder what’ll happen to him next.
From Ben
PrimalApex, Chapter 43 of TOT was astonishingly brutally indictively superbly insanely crazily humerously epicly awesomely giganticly beautifully written! Everything about it was perfect down to the last minute detail! The Erica VS Willow fight was so good and the way Willow’s power was portrayed was really really unique! I wonder where Willow ended up. Freya VS Captain Shortstacks was also really awesome. Shortstacks has been catching L’s lately though… First he got almost defeated by some guy who doesn’t even have powers and then he tried to dishonorably kill someone but still ended up losing. Freya knowing who Captain Hugo is is also very peculiar to me. He either exists as a legend in Ultimus or ROTP exists as a story in Ultimus. Probably the former, otherwise Freya would probably know who the Petersons’ family are. I can’t wait to see how a fight between Jerry and Freya would go! The King Titan fight portion was also really awesome. So he can bring down meteor showers too. And there’s NO WAY HE BROUGHT UP REUBEN LIKE THAT THATS ACTUALLY SO FOUL AND UNCALLED FOR. Anyway, the healing thing for the White Obelisk and the Herald of Light was really really well done and it was the best way to introduce it. I can’t wait to see what MGG does for TOT after five weeks of no TOT from him! Hopefully he’s still alive!
Ben, Dang chapter 89 was great!!!! Ian’s, Patrica’s and Arthur’s fight was great!!! June’s, Carlo’s and Paul’s fight was great too!!! I love how they just ate a bunch of recipes and became capable of competing with June!! And John has made new allies!!! Yay!!! Ben knows Paul’s alive!!! June really is a monster. This is how I feel right now…
*slaps June to the ground* “WHY!!!!”
But it was awesome Ben!!! I really enjoyed it and I can’t wait for the next chapter!!!!
-PrimalApex:)
From Ben
Welcome back Galaxia! Woo hoo youre back! I cant wait to hear more about your stories!
Hmmm, that leaves Biggest Fan, PastelGothPower, Aston, Fatooie, Calem, Chris, Lynx, SpecialRaptor, Reader, MrDemonRealz, and Angel to come back. Thats a load of people 😰
Anyway see you around!
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