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ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion

From Ben

Sylveevee I really liked Chapter 32 of QOA! Draconian is a cool character and the dragon wings are a cool power even though it isn’t as strong as the other siblings. I feel like the name is a bit too similar to Draco and might get confusing but i don’t think it matters since Draco got thrown into the dungeon. AND YES WE FINALLY GOT PAUL IN QOA. Now all we need is a Paul somewhere in Fjordur and Pandora Chronicles and that will make the Paul takeover complete… Wolf Syl (that’s what I’m calling her) finding the gem for Paul’s necklace was really neat. I can’t wait to see what Paul’s power is. Anyway that was a fun chapter. Although it’s about time I throw some advice out the window for you:

Try to focus the attention on character interactions and dialogue, and try to make the conversation impactful instead of it being sort of a driver for the plot. Dialogue can be used to express the emotions of the characters. Try to imagine how it is by taking conversations from the real world and placing it in the story. If that makes any sense. Creating memorable moments with dialogue will make the characters even more likable and fun to read about, making it more satisfying to kill them off once you do.

Aberration is not very aberrationy at the moment, maybe you can add some scenes of exploring the map with characters. It would be a great opportunity to introduce new characters or build upon old ones that need more screen time.

I forgot what else i was going to say

Yeah but that’s about it! Good luck and TAKE A BREAK IF YOU WANT TO TAKE ONE