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Origins: Chapter 2

John was collecting materials when he saw a strange wolf running towards him. It hit him that it was after him. The wolf bit him straight on the arm, and pinned him down. The next thing John saw was himself waking up. What was that strange creature? It had ravaged John, so he decided to call it a ravager. He was scared, knowing that there were so many...things around this cave...

one day. when i first bought aberration i encountered one of these with my raptor. ì thought they were as weak as a dilo. and how boi was i wrong. i lost my whole ass base that was located to the metal nodes thing. the metal nodes are hard to get in aberration right? i cant get it anymore a foking lvl 145 ravager and with its back that are like lvl 120. 40. etc. please like if loved my story. and dislike if it’s your choice.

I had tamed 3 rapters I cryopoded two of them put a satle on it I rode him over a river then all of a sudin 3 ravagers I ran got away as I thought then 3 ravagers shot one misle but I was to late I got the deth message your Lvl 53 rapters was killed by a ravager! I was pissed.

I was exploring the abb cave on val and I was all what is that it ugly