Draft Model#1

By- MrGhostGamer

Jimmy spent the rest of the class thinking of ways he could get spidey back. “I could steal it, I could start a revolution, no to much work.” Jimmy thought vigorously. As the Recess bell rang Jimmy walked up to Mr. Hsu. “Mr. Hsu?” Jimmy asked. “Jimmy, I know what your thinking, but I’m sorry, your toy has to stay with me until next week.” Mr. Hsu replied. “Please Mr. Hsu. I need him for Show and Tell, is there anything I can do to get him back?” Jimmy asked. “Is there anything else you can use for Show and Tell?” Mr. Hsu asked. “Unless you want me to explain the history of the pencil, then, no.” Jimmy responded. Mr. Hsu sighed. “You can have it back, on one occasion.” Mr. Hsu said. “I’ll do almost anything!” Jimmy replied anxiously. Jimmy later found himself skipping recess to do extra schoolwork. He finally finished when the recess bell rang again. The halls filled with children. Mr. Hsu walked up to Jimmy. He looked at the work he had done. “I must say Jimmy, I’m impressed, for someone who enjoys playing, you work really fast.” Mr. Hsu said. Mr. Hsu walked up to the bookshelf and grabbed the action figure. He walked over and handed it to him. “I’m glad you did the right thing and didn’t start a revolution or something.” Mr. Hsu chuckled. “Er… yeah, definitely didn’t think of that….” Jimmy laughed nervously.

The End…

Draft model #1 ending.

Version by SunnyFox57

Jimmy ran his fingers across his wood desk. He was brain wracking. Why did Britney have to rat him out?! Jimmy glanced at Britney and she smirked triumphantly. There had to be some way to get his Spider-Man toy back!! A idea suddenly dawned on him and Jimmy’s heart pounded excitedly. RING!!! RIING!!!* The recess bell rang. The class sighed with relief and began to file out neatly in a line. Jimmy stopped in front of Mr. Hsu’s desk after all the other kids were gone. “Mr. Hsu?” Jimmy asked. Mr Hsu was grading homework. His teacher barely looked up.

“What Jimmy?” Mr. Hsu replied. “Please sir…I really want to use my spider-man toy for show and tell… maybe there’s some way I can earn it back?” Jimmy pleaded. Mr. Hsu looked at him, and his eyes softened slightly. “Well if you can work really hard..” Mr. Hsu said. Jimmy nodded vigorously. “Yes sir! I can do it! I promise I’ll work as hard as I can!!” Jimmy exclaimed earnestly. “Well then, you can help me clean up this classroom.” Jimmy’s heart dropped. But then he wouldn’t have much time to play with his toy during recess. Jimmy gritted his teeth.

At least he would have his toy, his prized possession if he helped. He would do it. For his Spider- man toy! Jimmy nodded. “I’m ready.”

And so he began cleaning. He swept the room, organized the books, washed the chalkboard, picked all the pieces of chewed gum off Britney’s desk(Which Jimmy thought was VERY VERY disgusting.), and much more. As he worked, he thought about his toy and that helped him as he did the toughest of jobs.

Finally he was done! “I think I finished it, Mr. Hsu.” Jimmy said. His teacher looked up with wide eyes. “Wow, Jimmy! The classroom looks brand new!” Mr. Hsu exclaimed. Jimmy smiled nervously. Mr. Hsu reached up and took Jimmy’s toy down. “There you go Jimmy. You’ve earned it. Now remember…don’t play with toys in class.” Mr. Hsu said sternly. Jimmy nodded, beaming happily. “I will remember, Mr. Hsu!! I promise!” Jimmy exclaimed. His teacher smiled. “Go on then. Recess is almost over.” Jimmy bounded off to play with his Spider-man toy before recess ended.

The end…

Protectors of Pandora

Chapter 21 ~the oasis~ (Yes I’m skipping the Ron/Ping plot this time, that plot is far shorter than the others and this will make things run smoother)

“Bones!? Bones?” Ceasar yelled. “Is everyone alright?!” The chief said looking at his troop, “we’re alright, so is the bat.” “What about Bones?” The chief said. “Bones!?” Ceasar yelled again, running towards him, when he got close he could see smoke coming off of bone’s body and he heard a sizzling sound. “Bones?” He said. “I’m.. im alright.. ish…” Bones said, Ceasar and the others all exhaled a sigh of relief, Bones struggled to stand, but he did, he turned towards Caesar, and Ceasar saw what had happened; a streak of 3rd degree burns ran from bone’s eye down to his tail, it looked painful but Bones seemed unfazed. “You don’t look alright.. you need help.” Caesar said. “I-I’m fine..” Bones said. “He’s in shock.” The chief said. “We need to find a medic I’ll go on ahead, Jaxz cmon.” Caesar said, Jaxz nodded and followed him down the tunnel. “Which way should we go? We have to hurry, those lava things could come at any moment we need to get Bones help and warn the oasis.” Caesar said, Jaxz let out a shriek and twitched his ear towards the sound “it’s.. left,” Jaxz said, he looked at Caesar “it’s ok, Bones will be alright and we’ll warn the oasis.” “I’m not worried about the oasis or Bones, well of course I am but.. I’m worried about the others they’re scattered around who knows where and according to Salizar they’re about to die.. I just feel like I’ve failed them somehow.” Caesar said. “The others can handle themselves we need to worry about the attack and try to find them not worry about what some psycho told you, maybe he made it all up maybe they aren’t even in danger.” Jaxz said reassuringly (even though he was worried as well) “I guess your right, look up ahead. I think we’re there.” Caesar said pointing forward there was light in the tunnel up ahead and the sounds of creatures in the distance, they walked forward until they came into a glow worm lit room stuffed with creatures of all shapes and sizes it was very lush and there was a pool in the center of the room filled with glistening water. “Ahh newcomers, welcome to th- wait what are you two??” A jerboa said puzzled, “I’m a mesopithicus and he’s a badger.” Caesar said. “What?!” Jaxz said. “Oh, I’ve never seen a mesopithiwatsis or a badger before, anyway welcome to the oasis a place of peace and tranquillity where all creatures big and small can wait out the.. temporary apocalypse.” She said. “I’m not a-” Jaxz was cut off by Caesar, who said “nice well our friend didn’t make it in here in time he’s at the entrance burned up really bad we need a medic fast.” “Oh of course! Why didn’t you say something sooner, all the supplies we need to cure burns grow right here I’ll go gather a few things and meet you there.” She said, “uh you won’t be able to carry all the supplies you need.. he’s uhh gigantic.” Caesar said. “Ok I’ll get a morelotops to help.” She said quickly, and bounced away. “Why did you tell her I’m a badger?! What’s a badger!” Jaxz said, Caesar shrugged and walked away chuckling, he walked up towards all the relaxing creatures and said “hmm how to put this gently.. uh, there are iguanas made of lava coming to kill you all, I’d get ready for a fight.” “Why would we listen to you?” Said a hyenadon. “Because you don’t want to die.” Caesar said. “Eh good enough for me, EVERYONE PREPARE FOR BATTLE, THE MAGMASAURS ARE COMING TO KILL US ALL, GET THE WAR BUCKETS!” The hyenadon said. “War buckets.. how often do these things attack” Caesar said. The hyenadon looked at him, “enough that we invented war buckets..

The tale of the shadow phoenixes

Chapter eighteen.

Leah came home very late that night. She had spent time with Tom until finally they had reluctantly gone home. She had agreed to go out with Tom again the next day.

The next day was snowy, the sun was hidden behind the clouds and it was so cold outside that everyone had to wear winter clothing. All the friends except James met up at the musician’s house. Tom and Leah sat on the couch together, their hand interlocked while Arianna and Cole sat awkwardly at the table. Suddenly the door opened and….James walked in carrying a large box. “James!” Cole exclaimed excitedly. James grinned. “Hi guys. My mom convinced dad to end my grounding time.” James said. “So…how has it been without me?” James asked. His eyes darted over to where Tom and Leah sat and he smirked. “Kind of boring.” Arianna said. James’ smirk grew. “Well, I’m back! So..you will be bored no longer!” He set the box on the floor but held the lid down. “So me and Tom’s birthday is coming up so I convinced my mother and father to get me…something special as long as I took care of it.” James said, lifting his hand from the box. The box lid burst open and a puppy Australian shepherd came bounding out. She had one blue eye and one brown eye and her fur was a mixture of white, dark brown, and light brown. The puppy ran circles around the room, sniffing them. “Awww! That’s so cute! What’s its name?” Leah asked. “I’ve decided to name her Bellatrix or Bella for short.” James said.

That’s the end of this chapter. Sorry it was short.

-SunnyFox57.

This creatures coming soon after my birthday 🥳🥳🥳

Making friends

Arianna stared at the sea of kids for a bit longer she spotted a girl sitting on a bench alone ‘buddy bench’ arianna read she walked over to them when she got their the girl looked up “h-h-hi” the girl said “w-w-who are y-y-you” the girl said again ‘i wont stutter’ arianna thought “arianna you?” She said back “im annabell” said annabell they talked but when they were talking someone came up to them and whispered something into annabells ear she was shaking in fear after they left Arianna asked what was wrong “nothing” annabell said ‘she might have been threatened’ Arianna thought “its okay” arianna said then they talked some more and when the bell rang then everyone lined up and headed indoors when they all went inside and after ten minutes the bell rang to go home arianna went home happily and told her parents she made a friend “congrats for making a friend” her mom and dad said and they ate dinner and talked the rest of the time…

-sylveevee

Jimmys plan

‘I should come inside at recess and grab my spider man stand on some chairs and reach it what if the teacher suspects something’ jimmy thought the bell rang jimmy went outside then while in the crowd he went back in there was a 90% chance this would work right as jimmy snuck into the class room he was almost spotted by a staff member as he quickly went into the class room ‘i should make a replica’ jimmy thought as he went to try to make a replica when he finished it he quickly thought ‘maybe if i get on the teachers desk and grab it’ he got on the teachers desk he was at the point where he could reach his spider man Toy ‘now to grab it replace it and put it in my bag and run for the doors’ jimmy thought he did just that he put his prized possession in his bag and ran for the doors and quickly went out side ‘just in time’ jimmy thought as there were students crowded around his teacher and he was able to get by safely and at the end of the school day his plan had worked he went out of school during dismissal with his prized possession.

-sylveevee

P.S I never did this in my classroom but it was fun to write also play mission impossible music reading this lol but idk if i did the draft right

COMING OUT DECEMBER 14TH LETS GO!! As a 7-year ark player I am extremely excited for this to come out, and even before then, I would watch my dad play. So with this map coming to ascended in just under 3 months Im extremely excited for the 3-to-last story ARK to come out.

Draft Model #1 - Spider Shenanigans

Thanks to the help of Sylveevee, SunnyFox57, and MrGhostGamer's draft models, Ben has managed to finish his story and submit it just in time for his teacher to read.

As the bell got closer and closer to striking recess, Jimmy felt his mind wander and tried to think of a master plan to get his precious toy back. It couldn’t be that hard, right?

“It’s so high up though,” Jimmy thought meekly as his eyes looked at the awesome Spider Man toy so high up on the bookshelf. Even using the chairs, he would be too short to reach it. He’d need to find something tall in order to get it.

Just then, he heard someone giggling at him from the desk behind him. He turned around and snarled at who it was. It was Brenda. She had a cruel smile on her face.

“Are you going to cry because you had your stupid toy taken away from you?” Brenda teased him slyly.

“Shut up Brenda,” Jimmy murmured back, “You know how much that toy means to me.”

Brenda leaned back in her seat. She twirled her wavy black hair around one of her fingers.

“If you really want your toy back, maybe you can ask my big bro for help. You can’t reach your toy, right?”

“No…”

“Well my big brother can. He doesn’t like anyone mentioning it, but he was held back a year in the fourth grade because he failed his district interim. He’s pretty tall too. He can reach your precious Spider Man easily.”

“R-Really? He’d be willing to help?” Jimmy said with wonder, “Why are you helping me?”

“Because I can. And to be honest, I don’t really like that Britney girl anyway. Tattle tales are so boring,” Brenda noted. She looked over at her friend, Andrea, who was quietly working on her math assignment without paying attention to their conversation. Then she looked over at Britney, who was doing the same. She seemed tuned out.

“But I do expect a reward.”

“I’ll let you touch my Spider Man toy twice,” Jimmy suggested.

“Tsk, I don’t care about your lame toy,” Brenda scoffed. Jimmy frowned at her words. His Spider Man toy was NOT lame.

“Then what do you want?”

Brenda’s eyes darted over to Jimmy’s mechanical pencil, she nodded at that. Jimmy clutched onto it tightly and away from sight. It was a very expensive mechanical pencil and he wouldn’t let it go so easily.

“No, you can’t have that. Anything else.”

“But I want that,” Brenda grinned, “I heard it’s a good pencil. My parents won’t give me one, so I’ve had to settle with the regular ones.”

“I can just ask your big brother and I don’t have to give you anything. So choose something else.”

“And I can ask him not to help you at all,” Brenda giggled.

Mr. Hsu continued to ramble on about grammar in creative writing. Then, finally, he began to pass out some weird story prompt that they’d have to fill out. Brenda took the paper and placed it in her folder, and slowly began to put it away in her backpack.

“Last chance, Jimmy. As soon as I place this folder in my backpack… I’m calling it off.”

Brenda snickered as she lowered the folder into her backpack, and Jimmy finally took his pencil and placed it on her desk.

“Fine. Have it.”

Brenda smiled gently at Jimmy, picking the pencil up and flashing it in front of Jimmy.

“I’m glad we have a deal. My big brother Danny always hangs out near the benches.”

“Where all the benched people sit?”

“Yes. He’s friends with a lot of them. You can find him there. He’ll help you.”

RIIIIING!

“Okay everyone. Have a good recess!” Mr. Hsu announced, “I’ll be in the bathroom, so bother me when we come back. I’ll be in there for a while, since I had a pretty nasty breakfast…”

Everyone let out gags of disgust, and some laughter, and then everyone filtered out of the classroom.

~

Jimmy soon found himself wandering toward the benches, where all the troublemakers would sit. They got in trouble for a lot of things. Littering, failing to turn in homework for many consecutive days, or being unsafe on the playground. Disrespect toward teachers was another offense.

Jimmy could already feel the sweat accumulating on his forehead as he approached the gnarly benches. The blue paint was rotting, and the kids there were solemn and quiet, taking in their punishments. Some cried, while some were swearing under their breaths. Jimmy could spot a pretty big guy for elementary school chatting with some random person. This must have been Danny.

“So what are you in for?” Danny asked the random girl.

“The noon-aid got mad at me because I was running too fast during tag.”

“Pft, that’s stupid. You shouldn’t be here.”

“I know. I hate those noon-aids.”

Jimmy slowly approached Danny, and just stood there staring at him. Danny turned around.

“What are you looking at?” Danny asked, clenching his fists.

“N-Nothing. I just wanted your help,” Jimmy finally uttered his words. Danny didn’t look like a 5th grader. He looked like he should have been in middle school.

“If you want help with math or some stupid stuff like that, you can go ask some nerd. I’m not the guy to look for,” Danny said.

“No, I need your help with something else,” Jimmy explained, “Britney the tattle tale got my toy confiscated and now I need it back. But Mr. Hsu put it on a bookshelf and I can’t reach it, even with a chair. You’re the only one tall enough to reach it.”

“Mr. Hsu? He’s nice, usually he doesn’t confiscate anything. And if he does, he returns it at the end of the day.”

“He said I’d get it next week,” Jimmy grumbled.

Danny smirked, and got up from the bench.

“Well that must mean you’re a bad kid,” Danny said, “I like your type. I hate the rules. I’ve seen it all the time. It’s the reason why people like Patricia here must suffer. Rules are stupid.”

“Am I a bad kid?” Jimmy thought. He shook his head, thinking, “No, I’m not a bad kid. It’s Britney’s fault. She got me in trouble.”

“So will you help me?”

Danny smirked.

“Yeah, but you said a tattle tail ratted you out? Britney was her name?”

“Yes. I just wanted to check on my toy, but she told on me. I hate her,” Jimmy admitted. A smile grew on Danny’s face.

“If that’s the case, then I’ll help you. But you’re going to have to embrace the bad,” Danny ordered Jimmy, “You go beat up Britney, and I’ll get the toy for you.”

“B-beat up Britney?”

“Yeah. To teach her a lesson for telling on you,” Danny reasoned, “So she learns her lesson and doesn’t do it again. You hate her guts, right?”

“I hate her.”

“Then it shouldn’t be hard. Just beat her up. If you don’t get it, I won’t get that toy for you.”

“But why? Why can’t I just… I don’t know, threaten her?”

“Because that’s not enough. And you’re BAD, so you need to embrace BAD. Sometimes doing bad things is right,” Danny added on, “You’ll get it one day. Now. Are you ready? Because we don’t have much time until recess ends.”

Jimmy took a deep breath in, and then a deep breath out. He nodded.

“Yeah. I am.”

~

Jimmy slowly crept up behind Britney, who was eating a bag of chips alone near the buildings. Jimmy quickly looked around his surroundings. There was no one watching.

Jimmy leaned his fist back, preparing himself to pummel it into Britney’s back, but as he prepared to take the first hit, he felt himself freeze up. Was he really going to do this?

“I don’t want to do this,” Jimmy thought, “I just wanted my toy back.”

Jimmy lowered his fist, and quickly ran away from the scene. Recess would end soon, and Danny would have Jimmy’s toy as promised.

As Jimmy looked back at Britney one last time, he accidentally bumped into someone. Jimmy looked in front of him to see that it was Brenda. Brenda brushed her shoulder and looked at Jimmy with a slick smile.

“What were you just about to do?” Brenda asked.

“Nothing,” Jimmy replied quickly. Brenda laughed.

“Danny asked you to do it, right? Why didn’t you just beat her up? She deserves it.”

Jimmy shoved past Brenda.

“Just leave me alone. It wasn’t right.”

Jimmy stormed off, and Brenda snickered, turning around and looking at Britney.

“You scaredy cat! Did you decide to leave her alone out of the goodness of your heart, or because you were scared of the consequences?”

Jimmy refused to respond, but he thought about it hard.

Why?

~

The recess bell had rung, and it was time to go back to class. Everyone was lining up to get escorted by their teachers back to the classroom. Jimmy spotted Danny in the other line for the other 5th grade class, and as he spotted Jimmy, Danny grinned.

“Yo! I did it as you’ve asked. Now, did you do as I said?” Danny asked, walking up to Jimmy. Jimmy began to sweat. He looked over at Britney, who was standing at the front of the line as she usually did, with not even a scratch on her body.

“Yeah, I did.”

“And did it feel good?”

“O-of course it did,” Jimmy replied.

“Good. That’s how you should feel. I’m glad you understand now,” Danny smiled. He reached into his pocket and pulled out something red and black in color. Jimmy’s eyes began to sparkle. His Spider Man toy… at last.

But as Danny pulled it out, Jimmy noticed something was very, very, wrong. It was Spider Man, alright, but his arm…

His arm was missing!

Danny placed the Spider Man toy in Jimmy’s hand, and Jimmy began to tremble.

“W-what happened to his arm?”

“Oh yeah, the arm,” Danny said. He reached into his pocket and pulled out his arm, which had seemingly popped right off the figure. He put it on Jimmy’s hand, and Jimmy put all his effort not to cry right then and there.

“Sorry about the messy work. When I tried getting it off the bookshelf, it tumbled off and hit the ground pretty hard. Honestly you can’t blame me, the bookshelf’s high even for me…” Danny turned around and noticed his 5th grade teacher coming out. He turned away and began to walk off.

“Well I gotta bounce. It was nice meetin’ ya!”

Danny walked away, and Jimmy looked ahead to see Mr. Hsu approaching. He quickly stuffed the Spider Man toy away in his pockets, and gulped to himself, knowing that he had just made things even worse than they were before.

The rest of the day, Jimmy stared blankly at his desk, unsure of how to feel, and unsure of how to react.

~

As the day approached its end, everyone was beginning to pack up and leave. Mr. Hsu was wiping the whiteboard clean of all of its diagrams, and everyone was chatting away at what they were going to do when they got home.

“Alright class, we have 20 minutes of the school day left. And since Jimmy doesn’t have a toy, we’re just going to have recess until school ends,” Mr. Hsu announced.

“Woo hoo, awesome! Let’s go!” everyone cheered as they began to filter out the classroom. Jimmy got up to leave with them, when Mr. Hsu stopped him.

“Hold on just a moment, Jimmy.”

Jimmy turned white, and gulped. How could have Mr. Hsu caught him?

“Wait a minute… Dag nab it, of course he would notice the toy missing from the top of the bookshelf!” Jimmy realized to himself. Jimmy turned around, wiping the sweat from his face and standing upright.

“Y-yes Mr. Hsu?” Jimmy asked.

“Nothing important. I was just going to give you your toy back,” Mr. Hsu said.

“Oh. Really?” Jimmy asked, flabbergasted.

“Of course. You didn’t actually think I’d keep it until next week did you? It’s more of a school policy, actually. But I don’t listen to the rules all the time.”

“Well that’s great…”

Mr. Hsu smirked.

“You already have it don’t you?”

Jimmy finally burst down into tears.

“Yes, yes I did Mr. Hsu! I know what I did was wrong, I should have just waited until next week and gotten my toy back and I didn’t need to go through stealing my toy back just to touch it again and now it’s broken because I messed up!” Jimmy blabbered, tears running down his face. A frown grew on Mr. Hsu’s face.

“Jimmy, I’m not going to punish you,” Mr. Hsu said, getting down on one knee, “It’s our nature to get back what’s ours. I was like you once too. But sometimes you need to suffer the consequences and take accountability for your actions. Everyone does.”

“I get it, I get it,” Jimmy said.

“Now. May I see the toy?” Mr. Hsu requested, putting his palm out. Jimmy reluctantly reached into his pocket, feeling the grasp of the action figure in his hand. Then he pulled it out, his missing arm rested on his chest. He placed it on Mr. Hsu’s palm, and almost instantly, Mr. Hsu took the arm and popped it right back where it belonged.

POP!

“That easy?”

“Yeah. That easy,” Mr. Hsu responded, giving the toy back to Jimmy, “Now here’s your THE DELUXE SPECIAL EDITION SPIDERMAN WITH DUAL WEB SLINGING WRIST LAUNCHERS.”

Jimmy smiled to himself at Mr. Hsu’s last comment. So he did know what the toy was.

“Thank you Mr. Hsu!”

“You’re welcome Jimmy. And bring him tomorrow, okay? You’ll still have your turn with Show and Tell. Just don’t let me see it tomorrow until then, okay?”

“You got it Mr. Hsu! I promise!”

So Jimmy left the building, and went to the playground to play with the other kids for the rest of the day until school ended. Despite everything that happened, things were… alright.

Draft Model #1

Written by a fabulous 5th grade teacher

Adapted by Ben

Ben is working on a REALISTIC FICTION story, but the story is incomplete. He has written an introduction to the story and explains the problem for the characters. Complete the story with an ending that makes sense.

“So you see class, you need to put a comma before the quotation mark when you use dialogue in your writing,” Mr. Hsu announced.

Unfortunately, he had droned on and on about commas for the last 20 minutes so the vast majority of the class had completely tuned him out at this point. With only 10 minutes left until recess, every kid in the room was squirming around! Meanwhile, Jimmy’s mind wasn’t on the tetherball court or the handball wall… he was thinking about his favorite Spiderman action figure that was sitting in his backpack.

Normally, students wouldn’t be able to bring toys to class, but today was special. It was Jimmy’s turn for show and tell and he couldn’t wait to show off his awesome toy. This wasn’t any Spiderman action figure, it was THE DELUXE SPECIAL EDITION SPIDERMAN WITH DUAL WEB SLINGING WRIST LAUNCHERS. Jimmy couldn’t help himself. “Just a quick peak. I just need to know Spidey is still there,” he thought to himself.

It wasn’t long until his hand was in the backpack. Then the action figure was out! He thought he would be slick if he played with it inside his desk until… “MR. HSU! JIMMY’S PLAYING WITH HIS TOY IN CLASS!” exclaimed Britney. She was always a tattle tale and he just got Jimmy in big trouble.

“You know what that means Jimmy? That toy is mine until next week. Your parents can pick it up when it’s time. Until then, Captain Spider Thingy is going to sit up here on top of this bookshelf where you can’t reach,” declared Mr. Hsu.

It was as if Jimmy’s heart shattered into a million pieces. It was bad enough that Mr. Hsu

thought it was called a Captain Spider Thingy, now Jimmy wasn’t going to be able to play with

his prized possession for a whole week! He had to get it back. There was no way he was going

home that day without Spiderman by his side. Jimmy had to come up with a plan.