I can't even tell if I fav this lol

I’m lava and I just saw your thing so i have been here since late phase 2 (Long time) so A (can I calmly you A for short?)Your stories are gonna want good punctuation and grammar, you want some plot twists and drama. You need characters that you like writing about (cause if you don’t wanna write about it then what is the point) make sure to be creative and think outside the box. Always remember if you need help or inspiration you can read other people stories or ask Another fan fictioner -lava

K, A.Arrii, I’m a fanfictioner who was here since August, I may not be able to give too many good tips, but I’ll try.

For starters, you wanna pick a name that’s kind of descriptive, but also that it gives some level of mystery so people wanna read.

Also, drama, drama is great. No one wants to read a story where everyone lives la-dee-da lives where everything is perfect. They want drama, love, rivalry, villains, and maybe some character death for good measure. Also, you wanna make stories with depth, plot twists, and good characters who people like.

But finally. Write because you like doing it.

I’m out!

-Manticore

A. Arii, this is advice I give everyone:

You write for YOU, first.

What I mean by that is write what you enjoy, not what you think other people want. If you aren't enjoying what you write, you won't stick with it and improve, but if you write the type of story YOU would want to read, you'll find there are other people out there that want to read it too (though sometimes it takes a bit for people to find it.)

Now, if you want to improve your writing, there are a few things you can do.

1. Ask for help (which you're already doing, so good on you.)

No one is a perfect writer, and we all excell in different areas. Some make good plot, some make good action, some do better in other places, and it's alright to admit you can't do it all. Ask other writers for their opinions and suggestions!

2. Read, read, read!

In this case, I would read other stories from dodo dex. We all get inspiration from other people, not just in writing but in everything. If you're struggling with something or need ideas, go look at some other fanfictions!

If you need help writing an action scene, go look for a story with good action writing (Apex is probably your guy for that!). If you need to build plot and need more ideas, look at some stories with big and interesting plots. Look for inspiration everywhere, not just dodo dex. (I got some inspiration for Night-Mare from fairytales!)

3. Keep writing!

Don't give up! When you first start, you may think you suck, but if you keep writing you'll find that you WILL get better. It may take time, but all good things come with practice!

Hope this helped!

~CL1

I wouldn’t call Lolbit a god. Lolbit is more some kind of shadow.

-Manticore

I honestly jave no idea.

-shadow

Heheheheheh, Nergal, I need your help to make some of Lolbit’s agents, disappear.

-Manticore

Why the hell did everybody just become gods???

—Ryukenmaxximus

You really do seem like the God of Bloodshed, Lolbit. Sure, I’ll make an exception.

And Manticore: God of Knowledge works for you. Haha.

- President Loki

Ahhhh, God of Magic? Maybe I’ll be god of knowledge. Or why not both?

-Manticore

I’m the elemental of fire!

“ if you ever cared to ask good for y…”

-lava

OOOOoOooOOoooo, can I be the god of bloodshed?

-Lolbit

*blinks*

Ummmmm, let me check.

*looks through backpack*

Ah, heres some. That'll 1 dollar.

-the shadow scout buissness

Do you have human souls and chocolate chip

-Skeleton

*peace keeper walks in*

"I might need to re plan this expedition.. call over the others.. not right know though.."

*Looks around and sees many dead people and skeletons..*

"Sheesh.. they really destroyed this place.."

[Warning: level 4 radiation detected, turning radiation protection on. Time left: 19 minutes before death.]

"That's.. uhh... Nice."

*A shadow charges in*

"Huh?-"

*Punches shadow off*

Shadow: WHY ARE YOU HERE

"I'm here to investigate.. the nuke.."

Shadow: THERES NOTHING OUT HERE.. IVE BEEN SEARCHING FOR DAYS..

"Well.. you don't know that.."

Shadow: well.. really huh?

"Do you know where manticore is.."

Shadow: no.. who's.. manticore?

[LARGE ENTITIES SPOTTED]

"TOO LATE!"

Giant creatures that looked like giant skeletons with helmets and armor.

*They destroy buildings and trees*

"Oh.. god.."

*Runs underground to dome terminal*

"Oh no.."

Thousands os skeletons flowing down the stairs..

"This isn't good!"

Finally gets to terminal.

Presses dome off button

[Please enter password]

"CMON.."

Finds sticky note

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Oh forgot to say..

I hide the password in the

Laboratory.. sorry.. peacekeeper..

-signed LOLBIT

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"Really?"

Runs to laboratory..

Finds sticky note

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Oh, did I say laboratory

I meant the storage room

Sorry again peacekeeper

:)

Not

-lolbit

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"Damn you LOLBIT"

Runs to storage room

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"Finally.."

Gets back to terminal

Skeletons everywhere

Rams through all of them with Tek leggings

Tek punches the remaining ones

Puts passcode in

"Let's hope this works..."

[Dome disabled]

[NUKES BEING LAUNCHED]

"Wait what..!"

Everyone can hear the alarm from even the saddles

"I only have one chance.."

Uses portal gun

"I've done what's right.. white dye is more.."

-peace keeper/HJK

*nukes white dye and sets it on fire so Lolbit can’t take it*

-Manticore

*banging can be heard from the soil that covers shadow's broken animatronic suit*

*a group of scientists walk by and hear it*

(Scientist 1) what was that?

(Scientist 2) i dunno.

(Scientist 3) well we should obviously investigate.

(Scientist 1) well duh.

*they dig until they hit the animatronic's arm*

(Scientist 1) hey, do you remember that pizzeria we passed that had these infront of them?

(Scientist 3) how can I forget!

(Scientist 1) I think this is one's arm.

(Scientist 2) well, keep digging!

*they soon uncovered all of the parts to shadows animatronic suit*

(Scientist 2) hurry, bring it to the surface!

*they bring all of the pieces to the surface*

(Scientist 3) should we assemble it?

(Scientist 1) I think so.

*they assemble it*

(Scientist 2) hmm, it looks like..... a cat animatronic?

(Scientist 1) I didnt see any others infront of that pizzeria.

(Scientist 3) can it turn on?

*just as he says it the suit comes to life and stands up*

(Scientist 1) what the, it moves on its own?

(Scientist 3) can you talk?

Yes.

(Scientist 1) HOLY, IT CAN TALK!

(Scientist 3) this is a Scientific break through! I didnt see a batterie in the rubble, and it moves and talks on its own!

(Scientist 2) well we have to name it.

(Scientist 1) it looks like the animatronics from that one horror game, fnaf.

(Scientist 3) their names were like what kids would name they toy versions of them, like freddy is basically a giant teddy bear.

(Scientist 1) you dont think this is like those ones, right?

(Scientist 2) guys, its right here you know.

Yes, i can hear every word your saying, and i have answers.

(Scientist 3) are you one of the animatronics from fnaf?

(Scientist 1) should you be asking that?

No, its fine. No, I am not technically from fnaf, but they are real. And to you asking eachother about names, I do not have one, at least one that i can remember.

(Scientist 3) how are you alive?

I do not actually know. My master says that someone wiped my memory and he saved me. He told me to put my hand on this suit and I would go inside. He said it would protect me.

(Scientist 3) are you human?

I do not belive so. But all i can remember is to be released from this suit, someone must will me out, repeating in their mind 5 times "begone entity".

(Scientist 3) if you are not human, are you a ghost of some kind?

I believe my kind is very similar to ghosts, but not quite.

(Scientist 2) are you a living shadow or something?

Hm, yes, i believe i am a shadow.

(Scientist 3) try to remember your name.

I really do not remember. Now, I do not wish to hurt you, and Im sure you dont want me to either, so please restrain me, it will be 6:00 soon.

(Scientist 2) are you sure?

Yes, now do it quick. For at 6:00 my friendly personality gets taken over by my murderus one. Do not trust me after 6:00 until 6am. I will make something for you to restrain me in.

*a black metal room apears and animatronic shadow walks in*

Make sure to lock it with this lock.

*a black lock apears in one of the Scientist's hands and they lock shadow in*

(Scientist 1) okay, that should be good. Its 5:59.

*his watch ticks over to 6:00 and a loud banging comes from inside the box*

(Scientist 3) woah! They weren't kidding.

*they sit and wait until it turns to 6am and the banging stops and they open the door*

(Scientist 2) there, now over night we were thinking of a name for you, how about Mittens?

It will suit for now.

-shadow

*dark one walks in*

"Ahem, I am destroying this place. Manticore, you are WAY too annoying for our plans. But im not going to kill you myself, i think I'll have your "friend" do it."

*a shadow animatronic walks in*

Hello sir, you ca-l-l-lled?

"Yes shadow, now could you please get rid of this pest?"

Yes master-r-r.

*shadow charges at manticore and they go into an all out brawl*

"Ah, now to destroy this place."

*dark one walks around breaking everything*

"Ah yes, that should do. Now for MY army. CHARGE!"

*an army of shadows dash out and attack an army of skeletons*

"FIGHT!"

*shadow flys past dark ones head with an arm missing*

Must k-k-keep fighting.

*shadow charges back at manticore*

"Oh wow, after this I need to get shadow a new suit."

*a group of shadows stop fighting and a catapult apears next to them*

"Ready, FIRE!"

*black boulders launch at white dye, completly destroying it*

"Quick, get out of there! I need you to destroy more stuff!"

*all of the shadows dash out and run back to theri claws, leaving behind the ruins of white dye, and shadows broken animatronic suit with shadow trapped inside*

-a mindwashed shadow

Oh Lolbit? I was rude to you? Good. It’s rude to come in to my dye and start harassing me! I’ve got my guys chasing after you.

-Manticore

K Fine, I’ll get better defenses.

(A soviet nuke drops on the alps killing everyone who was there except me who was hanging out somewhere else)

-Manticore