Lynx,

Well I was writing a tip it deleted it. I have no clue how it happened.🫤

The reader

Lynx,

I have read one of your stories and I have to admit that they are great. Keep the great work up.

The reader 😀👍🏻

Another issue I noticed in your writing is that you put periods before phrases. I mean, I'm not an English teacher, but that really confuses some people. So anyway you have to put a comma depending on where the phrase is. Here's an example though I'm not very good at this sometimes. The king, a fearsome and powerful leader, led the war. That was one where the phrase interrups the sentence. A phrase is basically anything without a subject or verb that would sound wrong as a sentence, so in this example "a fearsome and powerful leader" would feel wrong as a sentence. But you can also place phrases before or after sentences. "The pups had no idea what was being said, playing around and practicing fighting." That would be how it would have to be instead.

-Lynx sorry if this is long.

Lynx:

Thank you so much for telling me about those problems in a world of dinosaurs😃.

The reader, your story could be a good story, the only issues I had were grammar and the fact that you didn't explain things in a thorough way. It made it a bit harder to read because I didn't understand it and it was short so it was hard to find the parts. This is probably just me lol. I am very sorry if you took offense from this, I more meant to give advice for the next parts.

-Lynx

The reader,

Read a world of dinosaurs in electrophorus.

Read it please I have no points yet nobody’s read it.

Alpha: Storm gray colored dire wolf

Beta: Lucky golden colored dire wolf

Hunter:Snow white colored dire wolf

Hunter: splash bluish colored dire wolf

Hunter: frost white colored dire wolf

Hunter: forest brown colored dire wolf

Patrol dogs

Fire orange colored dire wolf

Sunshine golden colored dire wolf

Omega light yellow dire wolf

So I was on my Meg went deep and saw like five of them I saw they were eels so I assumed they would just electrocute me a little Nooooooooooooooo! So then they come and I see electricity bouncing of one to another and they almost kill me

one time I did got a mastercraft gun in the valuegero cave killin this dangerous pet

Sorry, there were a couple spelling and grammar errors in this episode.

-DTG

Lol they finally added a picture of it🤣

I almost got my tribe mates Argy killed trying to tame one of these

A helpful tip should include a few more words.

Awesome! I liked it Reader

- Ben

Once apron a time I met this guy-ZAP!!! The end.

Hi Reader! Sorry I’ve been so busy writing that I forgot to respond to you. I’ve also been reading ur story and it’s pretty cool how the dragon is a shapeshifter. I wonder what the black dog is. The grim from Harry Potter? A fenrir? Anyways I hope you’re doing well!

-SunnyFox57

Reader, sorry that I haven’t been replying back in this section to you. I have been responding every so often to you in Achatina. I enjoy your stories very much and I’m keeping up with them!!!! I’m sorry that I haven’t been responding in here to you. Also you might want to use quotation marks as Ben said, it makes the dialogue clear and easy to read. Keep up with your story!!!

Until Next Time!!!

-PrimalApex:)

From Ben

Sorry for not checking in for a while Reader! I saw your message in Snail so I headed over here and managed to read the rest of Season 2 (that youve made so far). While it is short there is a lot to uncover! First of all the Land of the Dreaded sounds so cool. Now Snow has to survive in an Unfamiliar land with only an Unfamiliar friend, Bard by his side. The Araneo of Scribes sounds cool, and so does the shapeshifting dragon! I hope we see more of them in the future. Although I think quotation marks for dialogue need to be added again. Dont forget about that!

Ill read the next chapter as soon as it comes out!

I accidentally put chapter 16 of a world of dinosaurs in achatina. I had been writing in it for a while and forgot to move to electrophorus.

The reader

DTG, I personally want to know what happened to everyone else on the island