Dododex

ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion

From Ben

Hey everyone, I wasn’t on yesterday because it was my birthday (yipee), but I was able to churn out a chapter. Chapter 20.5 is in Griffin, it’s a semi-chapterish sorta but it’s still canon to the storyline, so go ahead and read it if you will!

SunnyFox you don’t need to keep working on A Hyaenodon’s Scars if you have run out of ideas, no one’s forcing you to work on it anyway. Take a break from it or cancel it altogether, that’s up to you!

Wow a lot of things I read. I’ll start with Sandmaster’s “Overseer” story first. Woah, this was some fun to read! You have so many unique ideas and I like the idea that the corrupted creatures make it sort of like a zombie apocalypse, fun! The Gigantopithecus Camp was cool, and Strongjaw was pretty dope, and man Blizzard’s pretty cool even if he didn’t survive long… It’s a shame he kicked the bucket so soon. Anyway I’m wondering what the Carno Investigation Agency or whatever it was called want with Blizzard’s body… Element? Anyway they seem like interesting villains, especially the Carcharodontosaurus, Ares. I wonder who would win in a fight, Ares or Strongjaw? Well it’s all a pretty cool story, so continue writing it, I’ll read it! My favorite character though right now is probably Scar, he’s pretty cool and loyal to his Fuzzball friend. My favorite scene is the part where Fuzzball transforms into his big form against the griffin, I could really feel the emotional intensity of it all.

Moving on to Tortuga; yep, you’re banned Michael. You’re banned from the redemption list. Very immature little runt, he will pay for what he did. Although I really hope it isn’t the end for those two. Something tells me it may not be with Aragorn’s medallion. (How come he doesn’t have a shadow? I really can’t tell… Clones? Nah, that sounds implausible). Actually tragic chapter today. And right after Emma and Andrew got married too, this is actually the saddest thing ever. Definitely on the same level of sad as Moonbeam’s death. If not worse. I actually recoiled in my seat when they got married. Then I sunk in my seat when I got to Chapter 30. Yep today was a sad day for Tortuga. And the British are here as they always are. Things seem grim. Hopefully Aaron’s animals take care of the problem, let’s have Ol’ Betsy eat Mr. Creepazoid and his brothers! Okay now i’m still sad anyway. Darn it. I can’t believe we’re nearing the end of Tortuga… it only feels like yesterday I read the first chapter and after reading a few more I just got more and more excited. Well I did remember you saying it’s part of a series, so I’ll be looking out for that.

SunnyFox, Well for some things that could have been improved… I think when Michael discovered his shadow you should have separated that one line from the rest of the paragraph to make it more dramatic. Dramatization really sets the tone, so when it’s just with the rest of the paragraph like that it sounds anticlimactic. If there’s any big reveals in the future, make sure to take that into consideration!

Sandmaster, some criticism for you would be to add more depth to relationships or friendships or family in the future. After Blizzard dies, Fuzzball cries a little, which there’s nothing wrong with, but the only connection they have is that Blizzard is his cousin, and they had only met for a little bit and Fuzzball barely remembered him. It didn’t make sense at first, so you could’ve had it that 1. Fuzzball knows Blizzard very well, or 2. Fuzzball doesn’t cry about his death, or 3. Have them have more scenes together and conversations so that the impact is more noticeable.

Well, guess that’s all for today. And before I leave off, thanks for reading my story pals, I didn’t think you’d read it either Moon, and thanks. I would say my story is less of an Ark Story and more of a Dod0Dex Story.

Later