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ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion
From Ben
Hey everyone, how’s it going?
MrDemonRealz, it doesn’t really matter if there are some similar aspects. I checked your two chapters out and the only thing that is similar is 1. Main character doesn’t have implant 2. The way they get there. I do not think there is a problem here so keep carrying making your story, I’ll be sure to read it once your third chapter comes out 👍. I like it so far, although why was John and Tantum removed? I know you said that it would be easier to only focus on 2 people I still think it’d make more interesting if more characters are put into the fray, and John and Tantum would be pretty cool.
SunnyFox, it’s still pretty impressive your story is 10,000 words! You gotta remember most writers here on the Dex barely make it past the first few. So you’ve accomplished something most writers have not.
The lore drop is in Chapter 18 itself… although it’s very subtle and is not directly stated. What would the fun in that be?
Also thanks for saying that about my story, I didn’t know it was your favorite! That’s pretty cool. This is the first time someone say my story is their favorite on something… thanks.
I read Hyaenodon’s Scars Chap 11, glad you got around to writing this one. It’s a little short (much shorter than Tortuga!) but still so much more to uncover. So it turns out Roxy is within the Hyaenodon’s tribe already… almost like an undercover, I wonder how no body was able to even figure it out. She’s like a ghost. Well, she can’t be a ghost because Axel can see her too. I wonder why she is killing innocent hyaenodons, it’s pretty sad that a baby died and an old one too… 🙁. Now the Council of Hyaenodons probably thinks Zora really is a murderer, especially Nathaniel.
Moving onto Tortuga… WOW you got a lot written down in the past two chapters! Darn it I can’t believe I didn’t catch on with Emma getting hit twice compared to Jack and Jay! I should’ve said something about that in the last post… I wonder why Hawkthorne did that. Maybe she sees herself in Emma and wants to release her anger onto her, which is totally uncool btw, don’t do that Hawkthorne!
Anyway moving onto Mayor Creepazoid. Geez louise, this guy doesn’t know when to stop. He clearly doesn’t know how to read signs… He is a huge red flag, a huge red flag that is blowing in the wind for EVERYONE to see. He doesn’t even care about the fact that Emma is crying or that she was hurt. He only cares about getting with the pretty girl. Also Creepazoid can’t even get his facts straight with the age… he was the son of the mayor I’m sure he should know more about the people on Tortuga. Also Emma definitely cooked Creepazoid alive, you go get it girl! And I guess I exist in the Tortuga Cinematic Universe because she mentioned me 😁, or maybe that’s just a 4th wall break. And Creepazoid is definitely afraid of Aragorn, her father. He does NOT want to talk to him about how Emma doesn’t wanna go out with him.
Anyway moving onto Jack and Jay, I think I know what Jack’s power is. Or what the medallion/necklace gift is. He probably can heal wounds super fast, huh? Maybe a little bit of pain nullification too, in which case… that’s pretty cool! Pretty useful ability. It makes me wonder what the other Peterson's children are, especially Aragorn and Arianna. Do they have medallions too? Or maybe I’m wrong.
WOO HOO EMMA AND ANDREW, COUPLE GOALS! These two get along so well man, I can see the chemistry improvement right away SunnyFox good job on that. Also Aragorn accepts Andrew now… that’s sweet. He got the fatherly approval! The ship’s sailed for those two now, (and Eric and Elizabeth it seems). And Aragorn is a great dancer, huh? I agree with Jay, maybe he is a good swordfighter. Maybe that’s how he protects the family.
Creepazoid must be pretty mad that Emma decided to go with Andrew. I hope he doesn’t do anything rash… I really hope he doesn’t do anything to Andrew I’d actually jump out of my seat and be like “NAHHHH”. (Also Jay called him a creepazoid, LOL!!!)
Emma must be really in love because she giggled (and she never giggles according to the story). These two are so cute together raghhhh.
And finally, Aragorn and Arianna talk about a girl who became mad with love because of her ‘friend’. I wonder who she is talking about? At first I thought she was talking about Tom’s fiance/wife/lover (who is now gone ☹️), but it doesn’t make sense they’d talk about Tom lightly. Maybe they’re talking about themselves, which is even cuter. And from that conversation it seemed like they were enemies to friends to lovers, which is really COOL.
Alright enough blabbering, but those last two chapters were really fun to read. Seeya next time. Chapter 19 should come out tmrrw.