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ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion

From Ben

Hey OMEGA09, nice seeing you again! I saw your story The Falling Tides in Cosmo and in Yuty. Anyway I just wanted to drop by to give you tips as you asked at the end of your chapter.

Okay so so far there isn’t much to say since it’s just the first chapter but I still have a little bit to give. You can try making your chapters a bit longer, maybe like double the length of Chapter 1 would be a good start. Also you don’t need to put parts for shorter chapters, it’s only if it’s super long. So that’s it for formatting, but since the story has just started I’m not too sure where you’re at for story elements. For now just focus on giving the main character Dylan some background like what he used to be before the ARKs (which you already did he was a gamer) and some other things like his morals (who is he willing to harm for his own survival?) and also his personality traits. Is he nice, or maybe mean? You can work on that for Dylan, and also for any other characters you plan on introducing in The Falling Tides. Well that’s about it, I’ll be waiting for the next chapter!!