Dododex

ARK: Survival Evolved & Ascended Companion

Chapter two was amazing! Amazing depth of character for Ron in just one chapter. Although, half the reading time I get stuck due to the sentences being jumbled together when there could be paragraphs and periods.

Also, the quotes. It just creeps me out when someone rights “this” and not “this,” or

“this.” The comma or period depends on if the character speaking is going to say more.

Like: “Strange,” said Caesar.

And again, the paragraphs! I need paragraphs to stay into the chapterrrrrrrrrrr…

There are so many people out there who actually have good plots and story ideas, but it’s the lack of writing type that throws them down as “unqualified”. They don’t deserve this!

your story is amazing, and I hate to be criticizing, so I’m just gonna shut up. Keep up the story. It’s wonderful and I think I like Ron!

—Moon